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Bird's Eye View

 I’m a bird with silken feathers

I soar high above sapphire sea

Eagerly watch the world go by;

Lands of flowers strewn with glee

 

I flap my wings and fly higher

I go where the streams ever flow

Watch groves and snowy peaks

Slide on a multi colored rainbow

 

I encircle around the clouds

And glide below cosmic sky

Gentle aroma sooths my soul

Where the golden apples wry

 

I dive in the valleys and watch

Sheep and cows grazing hoe

I rise again with sheer delight

To venture the hillocks and plateau

 

I watch sun dipping in deep sea

Dusky water mirrors the sky

It’s time for me to drift and repose

I lodge in a forest; on a tree nearby

 

At dawn I bath in the morning dew

I join the chirpy chorus and pray loudly

For the beauteous nature he’s bestowed

I’m a king of sky, I fly freely and proudly.

 

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  • silica silver member
    August 24, 2007

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    Personally, I prefer the half rhyme… although would like the full rhyme (lol) I tried to read the free verse to scan and rhyme doh! I’m a dinosaur – I can’t see any point in chopping it into short lines if there is not some scan or rhythm… is there¿?

    I did get quite a lot of soaring from this piece – it made me think of the albatross circumnavigating the southern oceans. I not sure your tweety bird was quite in keeping lol.


  • Sonja
    August 15, 2007

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    I can see that you put a lot of effort into this poem, I like the both way. It has a good rhythm too. The whole flying circle is done, from the sky, to the ground
    ~Sonja~


  • Sabir Abdus Samee
    August 12, 2007
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    Good

    I liked your poem.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    August 11, 2007

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    This is a splendid write. Very vivid.
    I like bird-watching and its wonderful to observe them.
    I think both the versions of the poem are good and you have written well in free-verse too...it flows well.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Harrisham Minhas

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