The tight black jeans,
Looked good on her,
He straightened his tie,
And exhaled,
Her blouse gaped open,
At the neck,
Revealing her charms,
His mind whirling,
With excitement,
He knew it was time,
Time to go,
And buy his wife,
The outfit in the window.
In a list
A contest entry
- Her Skirt, His Tie by zillion.
300 points, ended August 17, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Brilliant
I loved this, told a charming tale but also packed with so much meaning and great visual imagery. Ok he looked but I like to think that he was filled with 'excitement' about his wife looking sensational in 'The outfit in the window'. Great write x x
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Right Title
I was wandering about the surprise, when you slipped in in on me. Great job.(from a man's side)
Joe
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I love this!I don't know...I think of this as the guy looking through the window at the mannequin imagining what his wife would look like in the same clothes. I like what you've written here!
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Thank goodness!!
A sexy yet wholesome poem has greeted my eyes today!
I think this write deserves a hug! 
Really cute and darling, it is! 
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It has the intended effect, which apparently "the outfit" also has!! LOL
This poem made me laugh, I think it's great. -
sexy write i saw you just viewed what love tastes like for minutes ago saw i always view who is viewing me i really think you did a great job with this the best of wishes in the contest
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This is great...I was thinking of entering this contest, but was a bit lost for inpiration.. You managed it very well...Loved it...
ALl the best!
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Oh awesome. lol I loved the ending to this. So humorous and cute at the same time. Very original.
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