To those that have gone
I know not where
I have been looking for you
Yet you are not there.
For promises broken
Words left unspoken
Hurts not mended
And those offended.
For not letting them see
All the real me
For not making them see
All that they could be.
With the past left behind
The future an image
That is just in my mind
Of things that could be
Should the right steps
Be taken in the right time.
I strive to the day
When those things
Needing done
Aren't left undone
From slipping my mind.
The friends I have left
I am gathering anew
Though few in number
They insure I am not
Left alone.
Author notes
I was trying to capture what I am feeling about all the relationships that were and yet are no more and those that still remain. Don't know if I did it justice or not, kinda frazzled right now.
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
I felt sad and hope I love hope after grief that is for sure this is what keeps us going!! I love the title Left and the first and last line all tie together and the ryhming I'm into excellent!! Thank you for writing!! Also thank you so much for reading my poem I think you read Overdose Overdose the Walking Dead!!
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stavykm
I was ever so much trying to capture something special with this. Thank you for the comment, Rich.
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its amazing
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Thank you ever so.
CK...The things that mean a lot to me are easier to write about. I am a person that was raised up singing. I can write stuff, yet the words only come when all the things the words mean are clear and familiar to me. Rich.
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a good piece and very well put...i can relate a great deal to this piece for the few friends i have now are not the ones i had ten or twenty years ago...all in the journey of life...eloquently written with an excellent flow...thanks
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aliceramone
Thank you, Rich.
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You did succeed in capturing the emotions and thoughts surrounding past and present relationships. Something of relationships that aren't no more or aren't the way they were always stay with us. But I myself have seen the value of friends when things suddenly change. I try to focus on the beautiful and I've learned to let people see the real me, especially those that I love. This one made me think....so many deep thoughts here.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you.
Nic, your comment is most appreciated. I am working through some things right now and sometimes it helps to put it into words. Rich.
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Loved the write. It was definitely heart felt. The only thing that I stumbled over was the rhyming scheme. At some points you had a very set pattern, however, at other times the pattern ceased. It seemed...random. Great message tho
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Thank you.
EPoD, I have no training in writing, I just try to capture the thoughts as they come. Should the opportunity arise and you are so inclined, perhaps we can collaborate on some things. Rich.
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