I never had a challenge
To which I couldn't match
I've never made a single lock
Which I was unable to unlatch
I've never done a single deed
That I could not bear to watch.
I've always made a carpet
When asked for a simple swatch
I've always managed to look right, too
When told to look just left
I've always passed beyond their sights
When told to do my best
I miss all the encouragement
All the ego-boosting cheers
I don't miss feeling crazy
And the endless, wordless jeers.
I miss all of the sureness
I had every day
I don't miss all the sadness
I lived in every way
But most of all
I miss the friends
To which I became accustomed.
And least of all
I miss the end
Which became a daily custom.
Author notes
I really do.
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I liked this a lot. The message, and meaning in this poem is one I've lived all my life, so I understand the emotion in this completely. It was great to see that you could do all of this and still have a great rhyme scheme, but I think you could've done so much more with this, if it had been in free verse. Nonetheless, this was a pleasure to read, seeing as how I can relate to it in so many ways. Great job!
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very very good
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i like your stuff its good
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very well done
wow very strong and could bring a grown man to tears, it's so enticing and glittering, meaning i like it but you didn't put it in any Categories? it's a life struggle to get these things in this poem but to have them and then be torn away is a pointless act witch damages they way people can think, it's really quite sad.
LOVE hippy
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And least of all
I miss the end
Which became a daily custom.
this is life..sometimes this and sometimes that..and this, that and this, have been seen in your amazing words..thanks for sharing this heartfelt piece..friends are allways needed..I agree..well done..
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This was a good poem. I can really feel the passion in your words. All and all this piece flowed very well. I also liked the rhtme scheme you have used. One line just pushes you on th the next. I like the lines,
"I miss all of the sureness
I had every day
I don't miss all the sadness
I lived in every way"
Well done.
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Hmmm, This leaves me wondering what inspired it. That is a good thing though, because it means it touched enough to maje me care about why you wrote it.
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Very interesting indeed
Different... but insteresting nonetheless
REading this gives me the impression that you pen never left the pad as you were writing this... it flowed so effortlessly...
Great write!!!
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very different indeed, but I like the way the whole poem flowed. I think you did an excellent job here. keep up the great work
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Wow. This was interesting. It's very...different, reminding me of the strange obscure things I miss, that I'll tell people, sometimes. Like, "I miss being bitten", and "I miss taping songs from the radio." This was very interesting stuff, very catchy rhymes, and it flowed extremely well. Great work, thank you for sharing this, keep it up
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This was absolute perfection!! Great job. This has the feel of someone who has retired but perhaps still misses the rat race....
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You have some finely crafted lines with some very interesting thoughts flowing down the page here. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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