Brain bent
by twisted baby boyo~
government grog guidelines
and nonsensical
notions of mid-afternoon naps
thrown out of (already open) window
by brand new ginger whinger;
joyous injection of wind induced grin
saves sanity
before I really see red.
Only joking Jake, love ya really.x
Author notes
I am in receipt of a brand new baby boy, and i'm completely knackered. "grog", is booze. option 4
A contest entry
- lazy contest: pre-write party 2 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended August 23, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Appreciation Day 2007 by Kimojuno.
1000 points, ended September 14, 2007, 102 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Baby crazy by Gigi Lombard.
450 points, ended September 29, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Callling All New Fathers!! (Men only) by Turtledove.
650 points, ended October 25, 2007, 3 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Mother's Love For Dad's Too Judged by RedwingSpirit.
425 points, ended October 29, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - new life.... new start..... ONE RULE by lexy23.
420 points, ended November 7, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blessings of Life by Carpe Noctem.
525 points, ended January 2, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Cute short and simple. Great write keep up the good work =]
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This is delightful
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Great write congrats on the previously won trophy and good luck in my contest
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How cute!! He's a little red head then! (re. the ginger whinger bit..?)... gorgeous!!
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Fun, fun, fun
Knew the "grog" reference; didn't catch the "ginger whinger" though. But it is a fun poem to read. Short and to the point. The point being; life changes after baby comes! How true. Thanks. Walt.
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Ha
very good indeed. I hope your boy and your wife are doing well this is a good write.Goodluck in the contest.Best wishes and much love. CJ
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OMG - i do really love this!
GOOD LUCK and thank you for entering
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Not bad, in fact I love it; great job at writing this and yes raising a child is hard work. You'll do fine just remember to love and all else will equal. After all what could be 'easier' then loving a child.
Heh; keep up the poetry writing and I would love to see more;
Jeff. -
Ha! Oh, I remember these days...babies and puppies, just cute enough not to banish them...hehe. Wind induced grin, got a big grin from me. Cute and clever, no doubt.
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Cute write. I love your stellar use of alliteration & internal rhyme.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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this was a wonderufl write yet not exactly what i was asking for but none the less a wonderful write thanx
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I like the light-hearted, humorous feeling the piece has matched with the lyrical and robust word choice. The alliteration and assonance goes nicely with the poem.
I think anyone who has ever had a child introduced to their family can understand the poignancy, while still enjoying the happy tone asserted.
This is short, but it says so much. Great work.
Congratulations to the addition of your family.
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oooo i just love babies! and that wind induced grin, is really something else! baby days just dont last long enough.
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Aww this is cute. I know all those feelings quite well, remembered from years ago
Some really super lines in this
Loved the alliteration of non sensical notions of afternoon nap lol. Soooooooo true!
And the smile when there is wind lol
Nicely penned Alex Really enjoyed the read.
Gaylene
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This was very enjoyable to read. Congratulations on the addition. Your life will never be the same, and insanity will slowly take over..lol.. Just kidding..
Take care...
Soulful Woman
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haha. this is pretty good. I really like it. There's a song I like called The Red and he says "Seeing Red again!" it made me think of that song... the title did, anyways. lmao. but anywhooo... good work! here's a wishin you some a luck! Keep it up!!!
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Heh I LOVED it! Didnt get it on the first time round, but reading through it again, it makes sense and is genuinly funny. Well done! *clap* or is that... *applause* b. -
CONGRATULATIONS!!!
I had not heard the news that you've had an addition to the family
Savor it all my friend...blessings to you and to yours.
Best of luck in the contest!
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awww congratulations on your new arrival, glad to hear his keeping you on your toes. but still letting you write a poem about him, it was really sweet and made me smile
beautiful poem
and im sure a beautiful baby boy!
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Awe so cute and true life feelings thanks for sharing them...
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