Under a crescent silvery light
I paint pretty windows black as night
Windows of virgin amber glow
Soon to be darkened but only I know
Viewing a valley of vast glowing land
Knowing tonight they'll be black by my hand
I walk this land with wings of white
Unable to move them I never take flight
Possibilities glowing warm in this chill
As my label of red they greet with a thrill
But no matter the label, the hue indigo
As I paint out the light, 'fore leaving I know
I'd dream to hold closely, one so dear
But shadows are creeping ever so near
Softly burning my heart, on touched memory
Urging the movement and darkness to be
With their filthy label upon my back
White wings unseen; resumed attack
So bleak is the valley left behind
As if there's been some heinous crime
The only warmth coming from those untouched
Drawn to their heat with my raven brush
Prince of the valley of ebony dark
I live in the moment of illusive sparks
So taste me warmly, my new lustful face
Before shadow veils, consumes my place
In the chill of the night of new fallen snow
I move ever forward in mystical glow
With sweet ardent smiles they greet my face
But fanciful dreams are soon replaced
Let me paint you tonight in finger's strokes
Ere my unkissed mouth is forever cloaked
Such beautiful ruins I leave behind
As the memory of fires glow in mind
Please tell me what you think
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You certainly have a way of bringing out some stark imagery with your great word choices. Although this has a strong aura of sadness surrounding it, the writing is sheer beauty.
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Excellent. A very enjoyable read.
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welcome to allpoetry i'm sure you will love it as much as i do... this is a brilliant poem the imagery and use of poetical devises are outstanding...the only thing i would say to be careful of as it slows down the readers imagination is the repetition of words within a close proximity. apart from that this is wonderful well done and welcome to the best poetry site in the world my friend xxx
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Welcome to All Poetry !
A really beautiful poem. Love the Imagery and personification in this. Your rhyme and rhythm is also excellent. A really lovely read. Thank you for sharing
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Well to say it was a beautiful poem would be an understatement.
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very good
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The use of colors in this was amazing. Loved the classic touches, like the use of "ere." This is classic, and really well written. "Prince of the valley of ebony dark" that's just awesome!
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thanks
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