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So

To decide
Which side
Which way
Work or play.

Timing
Location
Finding
A vocation.

Associations
Needed for
Cooperation.

Past and future
Left out of mind
The now is where
I seek to find
Resolution.

Resentments gone
Things of the past
All let go
Peace at last.

So I ask you now
Dear readers of this
What is that keeps you
From seeking your bliss?

Look not for which
You really don't need
Look toward the truth
And only it please do heed.

Be not mislead
And not confused
Be yet instead
One not abused.

May all you need
Be within your reach
May that which you learn
You fear not to teach.

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I tried to capture something here. I hope it may be what I was trying to do. Any and all comments are welcome.

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  • Creatress silver member
    August 24, 2007

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    I believe you did capture it...if only it was easy to live this in life. I am a person that this could clearly speak to, and note taken
    Creatress


  • Kissafrog
    August 12, 2007

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    Wow

    Wow, this poem is really nice. What I really liked about it was the short length of each line...I think that it made the reader more able to connect with what you were saying. It made me feel like i needed to ask myself some question about my life.

    About the title though...its good and bad IMO. It did draw me in because i was like, its so simple and so short that you just guess what the poem is going to be about...but then again I think that with a good poem like this the title should be more strong.

    If I could I would, but I cant really offer any improvements to the poem. I thought the flow and ideas behind it were nice.

    Great Work!


  • a Touch of Madness
    August 12, 2007
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    gah i like it
    if i read this in the back of the book i wld so get it gahhh lol keep on writing!


  • aliceramone
    August 11, 2007

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    interesting ...very good rhyme and flow....some good treasure here and I especially like
    "resentments gone
    things of the past
    all let go
    peace at last"...good advice there and the last stanza serves well also...well done

    • rvh1956
      August 11, 2007
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      Thank you

      AR, I am at a certain point right now where a lot of things are getting sorted out. I find at times like this, it is easy to write things like this. Rich.

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