laughing
against the wind
you taunt hard emotions
I beg of you a brighter day
all I know belongs to you forever
come back to me, now peacefully
you are needed here with me
come learn with me
laughing
A contest entry
- Form Contest - Rictameter by Aussie Gypsy.
750 points, ended August 21, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a beautiful addition to my contest, this is a wonderful piece, the only minor thing I have about this is the overuse of the word me, just a couple too many times
Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I wish you the best of luck
Karen -
I love it. You are truly a writer that write from the heart.Keep writing and expressing yourself well. good job though.
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The use of several "me's" in such a short piece seems awkward. Otherwise, nice write. I really like your first three lines. Good luck.
I-Araxie-I
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