You say the stars guide your life.
But What are stars but rainbow gas.
Its empty.
Its shallow.
It lies.
It doesn't feel pain.
It doesn't cry.
It can't.
That's why I walk through roses white.
They're brighter than the sun.
Their pedals giggle, smile and cry.
Their thorns tear my soul.
My veins empty.
Roses red.
I leave a trail of blood.
No other trail, I can see.
I walk alone.
All other in a dilapidated path.
The light.
I laugh and cry at the same time.
Insane.
I think not.
I'm alive.
When all leads to nothing.
Follow the trail of blood.
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Comments
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What is "it"? Pedals should be petal
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Very interesting piece, I think you have a word mix up on one line though. I'm pretty sure it should be "They're brighter than the sun." rather than "Their brighter than the sun.". Other than that this was a lovely piece, thank you
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WOW! I really liked this piece! Great job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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great piece
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