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Eternity (A Pixiku)

 

 

Forever flowing,

the sands of time run

through cosmos' timepiece.

 

 

 

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Pixiku is the wild child of Haiku and Senryu poetry invented by poet   SEA angel . A short original personal quote (thought) of wisdom, humor, knowledge, moral, life experience or beauty etc. in THREE lines.

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  • jjbreunig3
    September 18, 2008

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    A lovely piece...

    A lovely piece; since you didn't exceed 17 syllables, isn't still a senryu? Anyway, it's still an enjoyable and concise description of eternity. --Joe

    P.S. I've got more of a traditional poem of the same name.


  • Lute
    November 19, 2007

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    A pixiku is where the pixies get their hammer & nails and goes about building up letters and words in the night while you is sleepin.

    when you wakes up all you has to do is write it down. Pixies is of course quite odd so sometimes you gots to unscramble the words from what the pixies said in their own roundabout way being very careful not to unravel the magic which spins in there with their tongues tucked in the corner of their mouths, and their eyes all squinty dipping in and out of their tool belts for the bits of pixie dust what they sprinkle here & there about the letters so they sparkle as you wipe the sleep from out you eyes in the cold gray light of morning.


  • CherryOnTop
    October 25, 2007
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    This is lovely. It has such depth and flow.


  • The Last Truth
    September 21, 2007
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    It is beautiful, may a ask what you are describing in this work?


    • Barbara gold member
      September 21, 2007
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      I'm describing time, and how it is really just grains of sand in the scheme of things.


  • Kari gold member
    September 20, 2007

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    I so wish I could do things like this I am kinda learning haiku some but damn it's freaking hard! This was pretty


  • JellyBean
    August 31, 2007

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    Hiya this is a really nice poem!
    Short and sweet, yet understanding!
    A excelent write keep up the hard work!
    XxSarahxX AKA XxJellyBeanxX
    Gold Bless You And All You Care For!


  • SEA angel gold member
    August 15, 2007

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    You have cyber ESP

    I was recently pondering beginnings and endings and thinking HOW ON EARTH did earth and us ever get here. Beyond that how did existence get here (period). Truly, miraculous and mind boggling to try to wrap my finite mind around infinity to comprehend what was was the original point of origin. Even then where did that point come from to ever evolve into now with no plans to stop here? How did the flow begin flowing eternally? If a BIG BANG what caused the BIG that BANGED?


  • TanyaB
    August 11, 2007
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    Time sure flies. So few words to describe the intangible. Good luck in the contest!

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