My fingers… loose around the pen
That inks my trials and tribulations
Shivering from within
Hair… standing on end.
Walking and wandering
Never finding a home.
My restless soul
Chilled to the bone.
I’ve not the energy left
To lust after death
As I did as a child.
I’ve hardly the breath
To pray to G-D
Pleading him to take me home.
Because I fail to see the point of living...
When I’m forced to go through it alone.
By: Jaye Eryk
Copyright ©2007
Non Monosyllabic Comments Welcomed
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this is so very sad, it wrenches at the heart. Reminds me of someone I know...thank you for entering
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I especially like the middle of this poem... I like most of the first stanza, too, but I don't understand the apostrophe after "within" in line three and I like the first three lines, but feel the fourth line of that first stanza is a little much, but that is probably just me and this is your poem... I like the way you spell G-D, and I like the tone, it is questioning and human and easy to identify with and relate to - it speaks of common struggle, although I am certain this piece is personal... I like the conclusion... it seems inevitable and emotional... there is a haunting, almost lyrical flow to this piece that I am fond of, as well...
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I've felt this way alomst every da, my only question is why abbreviate Gods name, great write thanks for entering
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Thank for the comment and to answer your question:
I'm Jewish and in Hebrew school growing up we're taught that it's a sin to spell out his name, even typed, so we hyphenate it instead.
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Damn,
I have a few reasons to go on, and yet the thoughts within me still crave death today as yesterdays. I really believe one can be alone in a crowed room. Some of these comments make for a good start on that collab, what do ya think?
O Tay, not sure even triangles are getting me through any more. 
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"I’ve not the energy left
To lust after death
As I did as a child."
Rich, dark, deep.
I like this!
Warm regards,
SW.
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B. E. A. utiful.
I love this. I understand your meaning of this. it is hard but you can't let life win. That's all this is. you've just got to buckledown, tqake life by the ass and say f$$$ this, you know...show it who's boss. lve the write
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Bravo
Beautiful... this one i can understand better than the others you write though it's almost like them , how strange, but as always there's you're way with words that has me glued from beginning to end.. i love it well done sweetie
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You don't have to live alone forever. You may be alone right now, but so are many others. The thing is, you've made it this far so you might as well continue in this game called Life. There are no rules, anything can happen.
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Walking and wandering
Never finding a home.
My restless soul
Chilled to the bone.
This spoke to me, as I have felt this way myself, a lonely, desolate write. Well done.
~B.
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