Each morning the alarm clock rings,
I've heard my death knell a million times it seems
I think of the day (the hell) ahead,
and can't help but look with dread,
with a hundred enemies and fakes
for each real friend.
What ghost is it that haunts my days,
that ever I look over my shoulder in the hallways.
Is it fear of what lies behind me,
or an inability to look forward?
Am I truly gone in this loneliness,
or is this fear and hunger what brings me unity
Am I close only in my distance, my emptiness,
or is it another sign of life too gloomy?
My only desire is to be accepted for me,
But would I find out I am boring,
perhaps "I" is not a good thing to be,
if it would send all my friends to snoring.
I wonder as a smiling face runs by,
Only to notice that they look over my shoulder,
and as they run to a real friend I could die,
The candle of my heart snuffed out- left to smolder
Author notes
See author's page for the thoughts (search "8/9"). Pardon the angst
Edit: November 4th
Please tell me what you think
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Angst indeed. Not bad though. I didn't think it was all that cliche and such. So that's always a plus. I did think the last stanza was slightly predictable though. Other than that it's pretty good. I think you should know we all feel that was from time to time. No reason to feel so alone.
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Very interesting... Kind of wierd, though, not my favortie kind of poetry... I like it alot, interestingly!
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Imagery. Prose. Perimeter. Emotion. This poem has them all. Don't be too concerned by what content is in verse. The meaning of the verse is what is imperative. Remember, "emotion is the fuel that accelerates innovation." That defines you not only as a writer, but as a person as well. Nicely done.
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This is amazing! Your words are so impeccably chosen and placed just right bringing an array of alluring images to the mind. Soft and sweet your pen spills its ink to create such a fine poem to inhale. Best wishes to you and keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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Beautiful piece you penned here. Great job. The imagery and flow blended well together. Best wishes to you and thanks for sharing this with me. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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very good
"See author's page for the thoughts (search "8/9")"
???? - why not just do the author's notes
anyway, great write
i like the begining
in contatrast to the title, it is superb to begin your work like that
as if the whole world is the walking dead
in the sense
that we all wake up to the alarm clock
to begin another day
lots of good imagery
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wow this is sad, and true, i know how it goes =[
but i love your poem, it's awsome, with a great flow!
my favorite lines are :
"My only desire is to be accepted for me,
But would I find out I am boring,
perhaps "I" is not a good thing to be,
if it would send all my friends to snoring."
wonderful job!
stephanie =]
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this is very good, even for an angst piece. these thoughts are shared by many, even though most won't show them. And btw, i have found, the smiling friend they are running to, often has the same concerns as well.
Good job with this piece, i hope it helps to get it off your chest. thank you for sharing this.
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