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Breeze Please

BIG BIRCH TREES'
WITH YOUR TINY GREEN LEAVES
WON'T YOU PLEASE
SWAY IN THE BREEZE

I KNOW THAT UNTIL
YOU FINALLY WILL
THE AIR WILL BE STILL
AND THIS HEAT COULD KILL

I SO LOVE THE SUN
BUT THE RAIN CAN BE FUN
BEFORE MY FLOWERS ARE DONE
FOR A WHOLE DAY JUST ONE

Author notes

It was hot as... well you know...I was watching the birch trees in my yard and I just started saying this. From in my house I can tell how breezy it is by watching my beautiful birch tree limbs sway in the wind. They were not swaying on this day.

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  • mommyof2
    August 13, 2007
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    Simply sweet and cheerful

    Hi Amy, I loved it! So full of fun with a great rhyme scheme.


    • AmyW
      August 13, 2007
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      Thank You

      I'm glad you liked it That's me sweet and cheerful lol


  • kennethlaney
    August 11, 2007

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    Good poem Amy

    Check out this form thou.
    I SO LOVE
    THE SUN
    BUT THE RAIN
    CAN BE FUN

    BEFORE MY FLOWERS
    ARE DONE
    FOR A WHOLE day
    JUST ONE


  • StarEyes
    August 10, 2007

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    I love it!!!!!! We have 6.9 acres and alot of it is trees, so I know what you mean!!! What a great job on this one!!! I Love watching the trees sway in the breeze! But tell me, why is this not in a contest? It would do great in one!

    and much love

    Nyetta