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Music of the Sea

The silent splashing of things unknown,
Unexplored,
Deep under ground.
Below the surface of sanity,
Something stirs.
Awakening her soul to something more than this.

Falling off the cliff,
The white dress billows around her fragile body.
Her screams echo around the canyons,
As she lands in the water below.

How can this be?
How can she breathe here?
Swimming comes naturally,
As she sails through the tides with ease,
Seeing all the scattered debris from humans.
Is she correct?
Is this her world?

Life is more than what is on the outside.
It is passion and love and pain.
It is hatred and fear and melodies.
It is not about hiding,
You have to learn to lean on only yourself.

The water ripples,
Sending waves crashing against the shore.
Who dares to go down where no one has gone before?
The curtain of mist covers the mysteries.
Soft, murmuring voices on the depths of the ocean floor.
A glowing in the darkness sends her body forward,
Spiraling towards the bottom,
Water all around her.

Is this the end?
Or only the beginning?
“Follow your heart…” She hears someone whisper.
Frantically her head whips around,
Trying to figure out where it came from.

The dolphins rush past her,
A look of fear in their beady eyes.
One swims under her and she grabs its fin.
The beating of drums matches the rhythm of her heart.
The sea has it’s own music.

Anissa Sapp
8/10/07 2:06 PM

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  • cafegroundzero gold member
    August 31, 2007
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    "its" does not need apostrophe at end

    Otherwise, it's a keeper. It is a keeper for its charm.


  • Pollycheck
    August 27, 2007

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    This is a very well written poem. It has a very nice flow to it. I enjoyed reading it very much. The background is somewhat abstract, just like the poem is. It is a very good choice as a background for this poem.

  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 24, 2007

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    What a different look at poetry, this is nice to read, the imingery is so nice,life goes on as one want it to, thanks for entering good luck sh


  • Sinfully Yours
    August 23, 2007

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    well! this is very good! I learned a lot reading it as well. I have to lean on only myself, right? I'll think of that next time I try to depend on others. Great read and good luck!
    Miss Marie


  • star girl
    August 22, 2007
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    very good.nicely written.keep up the good work.u did a great job.


  • perfectsunset
    August 21, 2007

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    This is a beautiful write. Great ideas and elaborations, it really gave me a sense of serenity and peacefulness while reading. What option was this though? Best of luck and thanks for entering


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    August 15, 2007
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    great write. I ejoyed reading this very much. Good luck in my contest.


  • Abv. 01101001
    August 15, 2007
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    Full of image and careful emotion. Wonderfully thoughtful and good luck (:


  • earthstar
    August 13, 2007

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    water ripples,
    Sending waves crashing against the shore.
    Who dares to go down where no one has gone before?
    The curtain of mist covers the mysteries.
    Soft, murmuring voices on the depths of the ocean floor.
    A glowing in the darkness sends her body forward,
    Spiraling towards the bottom,
    Water all around her.
    I really enjoy this my computer is extremely hot in here. I am burning up. This is great.I love the poem it gives me so much. It cools my spirit in this hot heat wave. I like the moral to this story to be your self take care.


  • LadysDragon
    August 12, 2007
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    Lovly,and beautiful.A girl finds her music in the sea,thank you and good luck!


  • Hells Bells
    August 10, 2007

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    NIce I love the imagery and how you put emotions in water.My favoright stanza is the fourth one. I love the emotions that flow with this peice was well. Keep up the work sis. Never give up.

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