None of the notes are right,
klaxon-redundant and boisterous as a tsunami eroding
away the isthmus between us.
Salty-Dead Sea-wishes are numerous as sound waves,
and I am traveling through your veins like waterways.
Your heart-vacuum surrounds, and I am a
ruptured eardrum, a burst blood vessel, exposed to your
Dachau-experimentations. Won’t you
scribble your excuses in the margins,
origami perfection spider webbed like cracked glass
from the collision of our intertwined gravity.
You are perfect as a heart-vacuum, as the
chemicals in my brain. Tone-deaf excuses erode
away the isthmus between us, erode us away as klaxon-redundant
cries pierce our hands and feet.
None of this is right, as our orbits align and
we swing together, star-crossed, in
an interstellar foxtrot, savoring the moment on eager taste buds.
Please tell me what you think
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"...I am traveling through your veins like waterways" I LOVE that line

I also love " I am a
ruptured eardrum, a burst blood vessel, exposed to your
Dachau-experimentations".
What a wonderful poem. You have a great voice with similies and metaphores, really. Very original and not cliché at all.


