She laid her heavy head in my lap
and with this I laughed
only because it wasn't so uncomfortable.
She smiled staring up at me
from beneath
with her big brown eyes glistening
and I started whispering:
Darling, You are Everything.
But she would not believe me
And I asked her:
Should I be lying?
I watched her stuff her bra-
really her bikini top
and she said
she was afraid
not to look this way
and I said:
Babe...
Baby, you are Beautiful.
Beautiful...
I tried pointing at the mirror
to make it clearer
just how she looked to me
But she said:
I'm just so ugly.
I almost watched her drown
in the shallow basin
of the bottom of my bathtub
as I watched the tiny bubbles
float up to the surface
And I know
she scares me on purpose
just to see how much
I really care.
And we shared everything-
And we shared our poetry
And really she wasn't so bad
Everything just seemed so sad.
And oh, how she loved to sing
And oh, how I loved to listen
to those lovely lyrics
lingering on lisping lips
lulling me to sleep
and I remember
sometimes she would sleep
right there next to me.
Burried in burrows of our blankets
we'd constructed just to hide
the color of our cheeks
as we slept inside
and drifted into dream.
I rememeber
what she said to me:
We are soulmates
We always will be.
I told her she was a model
The way she walked in her designer jeans
The way she giggled when she peed
right in front of me.
The way she was so tall
even without heels
It was just the way she made me feel.
But she said:
What you feel can not be real.
I'm just so ugly...
I really loved you
And I thought maybe...
Just maybe...
You really loved me.
I'm sorry.
You once were Everything.
Now,
Only a ghost
Of your former being.
A contest entry
- Your Epidermis is Showing by alexandrathegreat.
700 points, ended August 14, 2007, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~~ My True Beauty ~~ by The Hardest Goodbye.
375 points, ended August 24, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GoldenDawns Imaginati Romantica contest by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
450 points, ended August 27, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I wanna feel loved ! by Live with a passion.
450 points, ended November 8, 2007, 52 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Friends With Benefits by star crossed.
310 points, ended September 25, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - l0VE/HATE by s p i r i t song.
300 points, ended October 23, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You SERIOUSLY deserve all the trophies this poem has gotten!!! I hang poems I like on my wall (of my bedroom) and I credit properly...may I hang this one up?! PLEASE!!! It's SO amazing!!
-Andi
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Transcend All
Fucking Brilliant...excuse the french but it's just that good!!
Namaste'
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omg, this is so beautiful.. trying to hold back the tears.. keep writing
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good job
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Hey. A beautiful write, thanks for entering the contest
I'll let you know
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its so truly felt, it makes me smile and want to cry, it's so beautiful, I can empathise so much and I'm sure so many people can also relate. It's always those simple observations that make the greatest poems.
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it's so sad, and it's really hard to think about, what happened here. very good poem. good luck in the contest!
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oh wow. This is a good poem...very nice! Thanks for adding it
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Beautiful! Just awesome. But just like Lady Of Angels, It was a little long and I ahd to skip a few parts because I have 160 entries in 15 hours. Sorry, but from what I read, great!
Luv,
Candy
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Beautiful!!! But a little too long. Every word was amazing though! Good luck in the finals for you! Anyway, I relate. I used to think I was so terribly ugly, but I figured out that I'm not so bad. Anywho!!
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Thats really beautiful and with such a sad ending too. Its a shame when people don't allow themselves to be loved. Well done to you.
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Tear jerker!
This was so good, but so very sad. I loved every line of it.Best of luck in the contest!
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This is soo sad, but it's a really beautiful poem good luck in my contest!
xo
kandy -
*sniff, sniff* That is SO SAD!!!! But it's very beautiful love, you truly captured how much you loved Hannah and how special she was to you, even if she thought she was nothing. I'm so sorry you lost her. Keep up the great work, thanks for entering!
Luvs,
Cj
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Can you please write out b/c there shouldn't be any abbreviations in poetry, my love. I like the alliteration you put in this a sweet add in. Awww, what happened?! it sounds like you two were so in love. I'm so sorry, thank you for entering my contest!
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