This open wound
labels me a woman
and all that this implies.
Expected satisfaction,
infraction
laying in beaten cur pose.
Mindless masturbation,
penetration
of a hole any whore can wear.
Systematically abused,
confused
as to where affection resides.
Bleeding bullet hole
at each calendar turning
an accessory after the fact,
spin me around
my face has a twin,
there’s no real change in the act.
Eternally confounded,
bounded
by virtue of Venus genes.
Desperate inspiration,
annihilation
of vagina’s hypnotic appeal.
Final conclusion,
Fusion,
thread and flesh as one
and all that this implies,
this closed wound
labels me asexual.
Author notes
Fug-azi.
NB: The orginal picture this was inspired by is no longer viewable .. The picture showed a woman lying in a shower having sewn up her "femine" parts, so this poem is about her own self harm and the mental/physical abuse she suffered that pushed her to harm herself.
A contest entry
- Image removed :: by Naridill.
300 points, ended August 12, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - this contest might get me in trouble by vacant lot.
307 points, ended October 18, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - dark poems, cutting poems by nyc-chica420.
525 points, ended March 17, 2008, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I think Laura Lamarca knows what she's talking about so ditto all that. This isn't going to be very constuctive, I'm not that technical. You do have a very good footing on words though, can't deny that. Every part of this reminded me of Ars Poetica by MacLeish, it's everything described in that poem. "A poem should not mean, but be". I could never write something like this. Thanks for the entry, and good luck. (did I just quote something that doesn't air on tv??)
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I like this one...for many reasons. Poetically, this is sound and I love your subtle inner rhymes and alliterations. Good use of assonance and consonance in places too. Well chosen verbiage to paint the intended imagery and message. A creative format too that lends power to this piece. Overall, an excellent penning. Thanks for sharing. Laura x
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