I suppose I should thank you for opening my eyes
to how malicious people truly can be.
I see the dismal truth of you and who you really are
with all of your intricacies.
The abrupt demise of your foolish disguise
has lead me into a state of melancholy,
For I believed in your lies,
that fake look in your eyes,
kept me distracted from your apathy.
And yet, donīt be surprised
when you see in my eyes
a blank concrete stare of stolidity,
for your hollow lies
and your melting disguise
have lost all form of validity.
Author notes
At work, I received a phone call telling me of some news of a very personal thing... its kind of hard to explain. But, basically what I began to think was this poem. I almost felt as if I have moved on... almost.
In a list
A contest entry
- Just Do It by Facial Pagan.
520 points, ended August 24, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I liked this piece a lot, the flow seemed to be very smooth. Very nicely penned. Thank you very much for entering. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
Always keep on writing. alexox
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this is a really good piece. the poetic rhyme and the words flow in a structured way that offsets and augments the words. the end-word rhyming fits with the flow, which is rare for the kinds of 4-syllable words that you've picked. well done - and thank you!
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Pain
When one believes in another & the finds that lies abound. I can relate. But for the yuong it should be a lesson. Great write & thank for reading my poem" Vanity"
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wow, very powerful write. strong use of rhyming through the middle of the poem, but the language that you use and the meaning portrayed through it helped make it an involving read. I believe everything that you wrote down, feels like it is comeing straight from the heart.
hope everything works out.
All the best
~Hollow~
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