her face
expressionless
withdrawing, not feeling
her eyes squeezed tight to block him out
hating
the sickening lust in his eyes
invading, molesting
expressionless
his face
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butterfly cinquain
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Very short, very revealing, and strong on emotion, you were able to depict her feelings and situation, and his actions, emotions, and crime all at once. Very impressive. Now on to the subject matter : From one who knows to another. Hugs and remember: It's all a matter of being happy in spite of it. Otherwise. They win.
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I don't really know what to say. This was beautiful in it's shortness. Not a lot of people can squeeze in that much emotion in short writes, but you did it greatly. Good luck
Jeanette*~ -
This conjures rage in me. The act that you imply is simply unforgivable. What a terrible, horrid being one must be to do that to the innocent!
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