You have a doll
you tie her ankles
so her steps are not more
than one foot
You bind her wrists,
so every movement is as
slow and deliberate
as you desire
Corset her flesh
so her waist fits
as perfection
in your hands
Starve her til
her bones fingers
fit in your little
lace gloves
Paint her skin
with white lead
so not a blemish
can be seen
Cover her every
imperfection
with yards of
disgusted velvet
You tie her
in silk stained chains
and say
be happiness personified
And if you were
your doll?
Author notes
Though of this in law class, dedicating it to Lydia cause she is making me some dinner right now.
Note to self - Looking to improve verses, work in references, create depth.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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for some reason, the first image that popped in my head was this twisted bdsm japenese thing...
Beautiful poem. Really questions beauty and the lengths people go to to become their "ideals".
Yet, underneagth, I sensed it's really a poem about power and the urge to control and shape people into things that they're "supposed" to be. I saw it n two levels:
1) soicety and "ideal beauty"
2) one person's control of another to be "perfect"
The last line is a bit confusing though...I had to read it three times to understand it. It makes sense, but perhaps reword it to make more sense...or at least fit the poem...like, to make it sound complete. Instead of, "and if you were your doll?", you could say, "and that doll is you" or "beauty is broken doll" or something.
Depends if the poem is more about beauty or power.
Great job though, sorry for rambling.
~hippie
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This is really great and the imagery is wonderful. I really enjoyed this.
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Wow...this piece is really deep. I like the way, step by step, it's shown how to create a doll, but instead of making it a beautiful process, it's more torturous and takes away from the innocence. The question at the end finishes it off really nicely, too. Well done, keep up the awesome work.
Madison xoxo -
This is an awesome poem. I want dinner!*cries* I'm gonna come kidnap her .
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