The light
Flicking, dancing
At the edges of the path
Traversing patterns
Stuck revolving
Find the place
Where the shadows grow
A choice
Tempting, threatening
Determination at sole decree
Steps in darkness
Turn to light
Shadow stretch far
From where it starts
To lead
Showing, pointing
Signpost silhouetted dark
Open shadows
Fill with health
Love's gift concealing
Fearful lonely hearted ghosts
And give
Offering, receiving
Driving terror's cloud away
Welcome relief
This darkened haven
A blissful shading behind
There lies the burning flame
Shelter
Feeding, protecting
Strength to face another day
A place to see
Light reflecting
And take the path
Where shadows lay
or...
Author notes
Came to me looking at the picture and reading the prompt
In a list
A contest entry
- Go Out Of The Light - Overnight contest by CarolDesjarlais.
1200 points, ended August 10, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 36 -40 ages only Enter your best Prewrite Judged by RedwingSpirit.
475 points, ended January 18, 17 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent work here I love it
Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest.
I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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Thought provoking and shadowy.
A lovely read, Adrian. 
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I am glad you liked it and found it thought provoking, thanks for your comment
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this is grat and you did a wonderful job on the prompt for this contest
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I greatly appreciate your comment, glad you liked the poem
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ty so much for entering.... I found the poem a little disconcerting as if I wanted to solve it....good job! poetry shoud, jostle us a bit and make us uncomfortable at times.
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I'm sorry it made you uncomfortable, to me it felt like an uplifting take on the prompt... I'm glad you enjoyed your contest and thought my entry good
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ah, I had to come and read it again...I was miscuing.....
This is a great poem...it feels angsty to me...and that is a good thing...the shadows that we choose to enter, for respite, for reasons we do not udnerstand, or because we are innately drawn to them.
This is great int hat it makes the reader examine the theme...exactly as a good poem should...
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