Lie to me boy
Tell me I’m the one
Tell me I’m the only
When we’ve only just begun
Do you feel it in your heart boy
Does it bring you to your knees
Or are you just excited boy
‘Cause I’m a fucking tease
I want you to…
Lie to me boy
Tell me I’m the one
Tell me I’m the only
When we’ve only just begun
Have you ever felt this way before
Blood electric in your veins
‘Cause it ain’t a pretty thing to feel
To me it really pains
Can you please…
Lie to me boy
Tell me I’m the one
Tell me I’m the only
When we’ve only just begun
Tell me that you love me
Sprinkle it with care
Don’t you tell me the truth boy
I know you wouldn’t dare
I want you to…
Lie to me boy
Tell me I’m the one
Tell me I’m the only
When we’ve only just begun
Tell me it’s forever boy
Fill my head with lies
Tell me all the sweetest things
And never look me in the eyes
Just fucking…
Lie to me boy
Tell me I’m the one
Tell me I’m the only
When we’ve only just begun
Please tell me what you think
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I LOVE this!
I know exactly what you mean. I absolutely love it! Thanks for being a genius! -
I like it but you should probably put this under adult before you get in trouble with the moderators . I love the last line of the repeating stanza : when we've only just begun . it leaves the reader to picture whats left of the story to come !
keep penning
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More of a song...You should make that into a song. You aready have your chorus...The songs just a bit short.
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I like the way this one developes down the page here and enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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I've felt this way before... so desperate for whatever... attention, afection that you accept what is obviously a lie. It's a sad truth to the trials in life but ... that's how it goes sometimes I guess... I didn't really like the stanza that was repeating... I think it should have been stronger.... but other than that... not bad.
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wow! This is deep and I feel the anger as well. This is a wonderful write. It very well could be a song. I am kind of speechless here. Just a very powerful poem. Great write!
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this could easily be a song, alternative rock maybe? punk rock? hmmm. anyway it is a nifty flow, and relevant to me. im 18, fresh out of high school, and ive watched so many of my lady friends stay with wretched fellows, and i could see their pain, but THEY couldnt....it was amusing in a sadistic sort of way, and this poem was somewhat enlightening. good write
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Oops,forgot these guys
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The title is an apt introduction to this piece.This has a smooth,lyrical flow and an effective hook line within the chorus,the repetition works.Slightly unsure re the inclusion of the "f" word but only slightly.The emotions strongly felt within this angsty piece from the heart re the heart of the matter.Indeed the truth of the lie becomes the lie of the truth.Many girls and women will relate to this piece and many know a "beautiful liar" I could imagine this sung by Amy Winehouse,if you get a chance and haven't yet heard it please try and listen to her album Back to Black,it may give you an idea of what kind of music you could add to this in the fullness of time,if you choose too and one of the lines within the track Me and Mr.Jones is "What kind of fuckery is this?" The line looks harsh and uncouth written on the page but when she sings it,ooh it's felt,enough of my rambling,good luck with your writing.
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i love it!its really good and the lyrics are awesome
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This sounds a lot like one of my pieces, though your's is more like lyrics and has a better rhythm. I liked that it was very passionate, but you also stuck to a specific style and tempo. Good write.
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A powerful piece.. Not one I'm used to reading though.. Teenage love ideals aren't really my forte.. Seeing as my friends tease I'm A-Sexual or only attracted to gays.. 'Che...
It's true though.. How many times girls just want to hear that their loved and the only one, even though they know it's just sex for the guys. Because guys think with their.. 'Other' heads most of the time anyway...
If this is personal, sweetie, just wake up and realize that you deserve better.. I know that you've probably heard it a million times.. But just.. We all are.
-Danneh
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