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yield





this road goes on forever
my temporal mind revealing despair
& a spiritual one bent on the sun
i look in both directions


yet
there is no confection in the light
& the sweltering pavement hums on


the results aren't in either
this human race of deedless devotion
i dry my selfish tears
& refuse mercy


for that belongs to another
on some other highway
& to a different son


think i need some shade

    the simmering sun sizzles on







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  • poetryality silver member
    August 13, 2007

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    A very in-depth work here poet. This is a humbling piece of poetry. It shares with the reader the vulnerability of each of us. We are all susceptible to error because we are human. There are some wonderful metaphors chalked here. You did exceptionally well with this writ. I thank you for this entry in my contest and wish you well in all things.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • IndividualEleven
    August 11, 2007

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    Great title and great poem too, the symbolism of the road and yield sign is fantastic for the thoughts on life, nice work!!!                                -IndividualEleven.

  • Rowan gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    excellent.


  • Tirrell
    August 9, 2007

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    This brings that on the road flavor out. I like it alot, the imagry is fantastic! "for that belongs to another on some other highway", is a powerful concept.
    beautiful write!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 9, 2007
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  • Night Hope gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    "yet
    there is no confection in the light
    & the sweltering pavement hums on"

    An intriguing piece, my Friend. The results ARE in on your contemplative pennings, Scribe; you are always golden to me. Good luck in Renee's contest, Sweetie. Wanderer


  • Cherokee
    August 9, 2007

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    I think I really connected with this because, for me, it is about feeling selfish for even asking for anything in these times, when our trials pale in comparison to others'... I think about that every time I ask God for something... which is pretty often. Like, right now, my carpet is pulled up from a downstairs flood... and then I think about people living in mud huts and I feel ashamed. Thank you for this beautiful poem...


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    August 9, 2007

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    Oh, well done, my friend. I like the references within the context.... I pick up my own meanings and feel a comfort knowing and finding them there.

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