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Kingdom Of Angels

Missing image
She was born on Earth
But she feels she belongs
In a place that is known as
The Kingdom Of Angels!

Somewhere that is so
Different from Earth
A place that is so pure
And somewhere that is
So beautiful and whole!

The angels are real
And they are protective
When she was born
She was made an angel!

So throughout her life
She will spread her love
To people and bring such
Happiness to their lives!













Author notes

I was inspired to write this as there is far too much negativity going on in the world right now so I decided I wanted to write something positive and to take the reader away from real life for a few seconds.

ScottishPrincess

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 11

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    woderful

    Wonder poem, I believe in my angels I wright about. Angels are amongst they are every where, they protect us with a voice in our ear, or some thing will change and its our angels saving us. Your baby is beautiful and she does look like a angel. Very much a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing it.


  • ASmileForYou
    December 16, 2008
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    I feel it needs just a little bit more. It is short and sweet, but I feel it needs just a bit more to make the right point. But please, disregard this if you do not agree. It is your poem, and you should not change it just for other people. It was still a lovely poem!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    The sentiment really is quite lovely -

    but I would have liked to see more descriptions in the place she belongs. A bit more imagery to make it stand out

  • ElectricBloom
    November 19, 2008
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    Aww, this is such a happy and beautiful piece, and it carrys such a good message. and you're right, there is far too much negativity in the world!!

    i do however think you should add some punctuation!! it would really improve the ability to read the piece -

    you do have some lovely imagery though!!

    ElectricBloom


  • forevermyangel14
    October 29, 2008

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    it's beautiful and has a strong message, but it would be a bit easier if you didn't cut up the words so much


  • trekkergirl
    October 26, 2008

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    Hey whatever happened to punctuation? I mean where do we pause? Where do we stress? It is so difficult to read something and get it the way the reader wants if they don't add punctuation. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.

  • headintheclouds
    October 13, 2008
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    This is a beautiful poem. It has a great theme and message. Good write good luck in my contest!


  • new born
    October 11, 2008
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    I like the message. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.


  • Jenny84
    October 10, 2008
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    Wow this is beautiful I really liked it it sounds peaceful. Thank you


  • catalyst.
    September 21, 2008

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    The Kingdom Of Angels
    Somewhere that is so
    Different from Earth
    A place that is so pure

    I want to live there lol. This would make a great story, but it also made a great poem.


  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    i really do like this poem...and when i have a child..i will read it to her or him


  • Redeemed15
    September 1, 2008
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    Great poem. Thank you so much for entering. Good luck in both my contest and future contests.


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 28, 2008

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    She was made an angel
    So throughout her life
    She will spread her
    Love to people
    And bring happiness
    To their lives

    Very lovely and touching piece. Thank you and good luck!


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 16, 2008
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    hey, this is really good! it's beautiful! i love it!
    "The Kingdom Of Angels
    Somewhere that is so
    Different from Earth
    A place that is so pure
    And somewhere that is
    Beautiful and whole
    The angels are real"
    good work! i like your style
    and imagery!
    so i submitted to a couple angel contests, and i believe one of them is still going. you should enter! =D
    I loved this poem a whole bunch! <3
    good luck in your contests! i am considering you! =D
    -Peanut Butter Fudge
    loves it/ loves you! =D


  • HaleighGrace
    August 15, 2008
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    AAWWWWW--GL and thanks for entering
    HALEIGH


  • HaleighGrace
    August 14, 2008
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    This such a sweet poem--GL and thankyou for entering my contest.
    HALEIGH


  • individuality gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    a good poem, aye and that is how everyone should feel, if they did the world would be a much nicer place with no wars and such

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      May 19, 2008
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      Thank you for commenting on this and I am proud to have written this poem,I am delighted you like this and it is my pleasure for sharing this with you,this poem takes the reader away from the world we live in today,Hazel


  • aboomer silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    Very lovely words! And worthy thoughts to attain - spreading happiness to others.
    thank you for your lovely entry
    best wishes


    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      May 1, 2008
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      Thank you for commenting ,It was a pleasure to enter your contest with this,glad you like this,God Bless


  • Georges silver member
    August 27, 2007

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    Born here, but a spiritual and winged being beneath the facade of flesh. A dreamer that imagines that she can alter the twisted hand of fate by spreading her wings and forming happiness. Excellent poem that is simplistic yet complicated and shows and suggests, the divided psyche of some gifted people. This is well worthy of my applause.
    Best Wishes.
    Georges.

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 28, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting on this and I am proud to have written this poem,I am delighted you like this and it is my pleasure for sharing this with you,this poem takes the reader away from the world we live in today,Hazel


  • God of Thunder
    August 15, 2007
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    WOW! Hazel this is so beautiful just wonderful thank you for sharing


  • Talking Toni gold member
    August 14, 2007

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    Heavenly Write.......................

    this sounds like heaven on earth for the one lucky enough to have this angel in their lives. This had such a poetic flair to it as I read I felt like I was floating on a cloud with your beautiful imagery in this piece. I love the last lines best "She will spread her love to people and bring happiness into their lives" Ties the poem all together.Thanks for sharing this with me tonight!!!~~Toni~~

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 14, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting on this and I am proud to have written this poem,I am delighted you like this and it is my pleasure for sharing this with you,feel free to check my other poems,God Bless..Hazel


  • cutiepie gold member
    August 11, 2007

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    There is an ethereal feel throughout this poem.It speaks of a knowledge deeply ingrained. To live as an angel ( or messenger) shows a loving heart, willing to share all to others. Beautifully written

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 11, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting on this,this poem is one that means alot and I am glad people can relate to this,God Bless

  • Aurora Ceres
    August 11, 2007

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    Aww, Sweetie.  I love your heart and caring spirit. It oozes in this poem.
    'When she was born
    She was made an angel
    So throughout her life
    She will spread her
    Love to people
    And bring happiness
    To their lives'

    *sniff sniff* So beautiful sweetie and ya know, sounds so much like you for you are certainly and angel among us. Love you, Hazel and love your poem.

    Love,
    Ash


    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 11, 2007
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      Ash I am an angel,thats why I wrote it lol,hehe,glad you love this,I love you too!


  • MissyAnn
    August 9, 2007

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    WOW

    I have just passed a an indeering(sp) spell in my life of wanting so badly to be in a better place that earth! This poem is soooo good. I see the meaning and reality in this!

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 10, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting on this,glad you can relate to this poem!..feel free to read my other writes,Love,Hazel


  • RedAquarius
    August 9, 2007

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    This is full of hope, grace, and strength. A very loving, almost reassuring piece for the reader - lovely indeed.

  • eternal-devotion
    August 9, 2007

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    OH! WOW

    I can relate to this poem. All of it is my favorite. There is nothin that sounds awkward to me. I have always felt the need to bring happiness to others, even at my own expence. I believe there is a place like you wrote about. I also believe That there are angels here on earth that were sent from as you put it " The Kingdom Of Angels." The title,first and last lines were right for this poem. I don't feel that I would change anything about this poem. It is beautiful to me just as it is. As I have always heard beauty is in the eye of the beholder and so too is the written word. Keep up the good work. Your writing is something to be cherished.

    • ScottishPrincess silver member
      August 10, 2007
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      Glad you can relate to this and it was such a delight to write this,feel free to read my other writes,Love,Hazel

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