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Raven Poet

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Raven Poet

Trapped within the caverns of your mind
Rolling hills and constant motion within
Absolutely infested with pure thought
Virtual cognitive reason seeks freedom
Emotional intelligence within the poet
Nature's mountain, intellectual strength

Poetry from the human mind builds strength
Objective reasoning opens the poetic mind
Equality in the written word is within the poet
The art of poetry need not be trapped within
We have the tools to escape and acquire freedom
Yet this mountain still tries to bind our thought

We strive to think beyond common thought
In the realization we are born with strength
Fighting to get out and earn our freedom
There is love trapped within our poetic mind
And the pen releases the beauty within
Listen to me and learn to be a Raven poet

Do not follow the crowd, just be a poet
Release your inner self with galloping thought
Escape from the mountain, use the power within
Do not listen to others, use your inner strength
Mountains hold those who don’t speak their mind
Within solid walls we lose creative freedom

Tear away the bonds; open your mind to freedom
There is no greater gift than the soul of a poet
Lead the herd, tear away, they’ll follow your mind
You’ll find that others agree with your thought
Like a Raven Black Steed they envy your strength
Open your heart, find power within

Once you escape you’ll see love within
Galloping away to a new found freedom
Trust in yourself, see amazing strength
Be proud you are now, a Raven poet
You realize your pen is the power of thought
So lead the herd and don’t change your mind

The power within the Raven poet
Lends freedom to creative thought
Use your strength and trust your poetic mind

 

 

 

Author notes

This poem is constructed in three styles: acrostic, sestina and rictameter .

For form guidelines see: Shadowpoetry.com
Art work by: unknown

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  • Tirrell
    February 7

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    I like the combination, this is full of philosophy, a brilliant poem, the acrostic could be a poem of its own,
    "A moody child widely wise
    pursued the game with joyful eyes,"
    Opening lines of Emerson's The Poet

  • lalithashree
    July 30, 2008
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    great poem


  • LittleMoon silver member
    April 24, 2008

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    In a different class to the rest of us. I never enter a contest usually if I see your name but I entered before seeing you here. You are way out on your own with another brilliant write.


    • Amera gold member
      April 24, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment but please don't feel that way. There are better poets on this site than me and I use them to learn from. One of them is Mairi bheag - when I see her in a contest, I try to write a better poem that she did. I usually can't do it but by trying, I improve my own skills. We are all here to learn and help one another.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    April 24, 2008

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    Thank you for your most beautifully creative dark entry, good luck, Josie


  • They Say Shannon
    September 13, 2007

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    What lovely adjectives and imagery!
    They were very nice and I liked how you made the words in a different color.
    A nice effect that completely added to it.

    The ending was strong as well as the rest of the poem!

    I did like this one a lot.
    Thank you for entering and good luck! <


  • LexieLost
    August 17, 2007

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    Nice job

    This is a very nicely written poem. I really enjoy the overall flow of the poem. As for the imagery, it is overall sharp. It is imprinted on my mind as i am able to close my eyes and still see the images freshly. That is a very good quality to a poem. If it is only a fleeting image than writer has not done a good job conveying their desires, their hopes, and their emotions.

    "Equality in the written word is within the poet"

    this a very powerful statement. I always strive to promote equality within my poems. So to this phrase truly speaks in a very simple manner.

    "Tear away the bonds; open your mind to freedom
    There is no greater gift than the soul of a poet
    Lead the herd, tear away, they’ll follow your mind
    You’ll find that others agree with your thought
    Like a Raven Black Steed they envy your strength
    Open your heart, find power within"

    this section is also true. Poets, if they are worth a grain of salt, are great leaders who can cause people to direct their minds into a powerful entity of change and revolution.

    great write. actually that is cliche in your case, as most of your writes are great.

    ~Kimberly~


  • earthstar
    August 16, 2007

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    To me this is written from you true self where thoughts are original and fresh illuminating thoughts. The eloquence of your voice is outstanding.
    This is truly extraordinary in the combination of forms used. It does not sound force or trite. Raven contest is finding or uncovering genius in the written word. To me it finding a boldness,who has freedom to write from a person true self.
    Not about fame it about the love of the written word. Who is not afraid to share a personal part of who they are with us the reader.
    To me writing is about respecting yourself enough to write what goes though a writer. That true and believable.
    I am reading a book about a author who writes about writing from our true self. To let poetic experiences come from our living.
    Being free and open to all things in life. I truly think she would be very proud of your write.
    I truly adored it. I wish you the very best in this contest.


  • maa gold member
    August 16, 2007

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    amazing how you combined 3 poetry-forms in order to create one poem ... I still haven't tried out the sestina yet, and am completely ignorant about its rules and requirements, but poetry is like music and visual art : we can appreciate a painting or a song without the necessity to "understand" its structure intellectually ...
    so I just appreciate the delicious dish, and say "thank you for the treat !"


    marion


  • XyMaya
    August 14, 2007

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    I really love how much advice you put in this piece.
    You tell the world to be it's own person and to mark out your own trail, something I go by, and you say it with out throwing it peoples faces.
    Amazing write!

    ~Maya


  • micol
    August 14, 2007

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    Almost by its nature, the sestina tends to be solid, substantive. Especially when it uses such abstract, philosophical words as this one does. It announces that it must be attended to, taken seriously.

    The embedded poems merely add to that sense of weight and complexity. And do so effectively.

    What I find most appealing about the poem (since I'm not to sure about the whole Raven Poet background) is that it starts assertively, with statement after statement that establish its tone and rhythm. Then gradually image begins to emerge, slowly at first, then more rapidly until the poem takes on almost a narrative impetus. The last few stanzas build to the released energy implicit in the picture.

    Given the challenges you've given yourself, this is a tour de force poem, one that never lets itself rest but immediately moves on to another level of demand.

    The envoy beautifully encapsulates the poem, a fitting climax to the form and the content. A very strong poem. Best of luck in the contest.

    [For a rather emaciated variation of the form, take a look at my medial sestina at http://allpoetry.com/poem/3299086.]


  • capricornpoet
    August 13, 2007

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    an epic

    Through and through epic of a poet, a raven poet at that..lovely as it comes to a climax of wills battling, then flying on the raven poets wings ..
    Always inspiring your magic quill..


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    Ohhhh Amera sweetie, you are so dang talented! Beautiful penning, jut beautiful. Your imagery is always five star! Excellent metaphors and just a fabulous read! Gold...yep, Gold ~tia


  • Desire gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Magnificent words You have penned Beautiful one and Love the message You have conveyed not only in one piece but the second also third one as well!!
    Go on Form Queen
    Wonderfully woven
    Captures the essence of the Raven Poet!!
    Loved this!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    I don't know where to start with this one - any lit crit would be superfluous. I'll say this: it's theme is artistic power, and appropriately it is one of the most technically powerful poems I have ever read. Do well in the contest!


  • captain howdy
    August 9, 2007

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    *jaw drops* Brilliant use of all three forms! A beautiful piece! *plus twenty applause* Best of luck in the contest!!!!


  • Never Fall in Love
    August 9, 2007

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    *stares dumbfoundedly*

    omg, this is absolutely brilliant!!!!

    "There is no greater gift than the soul of a poet"

    That can't be put in a more truthful statement. Often I wonder what would have happened to me if I never tried my first poem. I'd probably have been a cutter and still depressed. Being a poet {if you can call me one} .. well, being able to write out my feelings is one of the best sorts of escape from life and stress. The more I write, the better I feel. I'm ranting, am I?

    In the end, my gosh, this is excellent. You make me lose hope on my own entry. Now I know I can't possibly be aiming for gold after reading this... my sis here has taken it already
    All the best in the contest
    I really hope you win. You deserve it

    NeveR ♥

    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2007

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      Never Fall in Luv

      Aww... thanks so much Sis and you are a poet and a good one. Remember it was I who chose you as an AP sister. It wasn't just for your good taste in clothes. Love ya!


  • RedAquarius
    August 9, 2007

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    This is utterly amazing. Penned with deft skill, not one or two but three forms united to strike chords within the reader. In my book, you are a Raven Poet! Jeez, and I thought I could sometimes turn a phrase or two...


  • sunny day
    August 9, 2007

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    As I see this raven poet leading the herd to greener pastures where their thoughts may flow freely I am left in awe of the beauty my eyes beheld. Two forms in one piece are becoming not enough for your intellectual pen and fantastic imagination that adorns this page with such imagery, now we have a third within one. I can feel myself on the mountain as I watch this raven steed take the herd to a place never imagined and say this is ours, this is the place, the place where we make our dreams come true through our pen. Amazing piece you penned for the contest here and for poetry itself. You are in my eyes, a Poet Laureate. Kudos for this brilliant write and thank you so much for sharing. Best wishes in the contest with it because it sounds golden to me. Love you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2007
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      What a wonderful comment; thank you so much.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • HaleyMary
    August 9, 2007

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    Beautiful write. I liked the part of not following a crowd. That's how every poet should write poetry. Just be themselves and write the way they want to and try to be different from other poets. If all poets were the same poems would be rather boring to read. The joys of poetry is creating something different. Good luck in the contest.


  • DawnBaby
    August 9, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Good entry into the Raven Contest! I also am in the contest, very exciting for me. Excellent use of three different styles of poetry.


  • PerVirtuous
    August 9, 2007

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    Well... I was going to enter... but now I don't think I stand a chance... *sigh* why do you have to be so good at these? Ha ha ha. I love it and would love to lose to you! You got a gold in the first round, so I would not be surprised if this won, too. It certainly will be tough to top. All I can say is the half of the mountain within my view is perfect!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    August 9, 2007

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    bookmarked for later, after well needed sleep. zzzzzzzzzzzzz....................


  • FallingTwilight
    August 9, 2007

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    Brilliant. It's a wonderful piece. Excellently well-written and very creative. I love that you were able to use three forms in one piece. It's a beautiful piece. I wish you all the luck in the contest,

    FallenPoeticAngel


  • Swan song gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    I don't think I need to say anything here. This is wonderful well written and very imaginative. Awe aspiring dear! Bravo!

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