It feels almost like Christmas
feelings leading to the moment.
Only two times do I hope
each day,
as I type the familiar
address and tentatively
strike enter.
Each morning,
each night,
I check and I
hope for a trace of you
there.
A smile, a word, an I love you.
But like an orphan,
my Christmas doesn't come.
Disappointment and depression heckle
in my ears and my heart sinks.
"Last seen 1 day ago."
"Last seen 3 hours ago."
"Last seen 22 minutes ago."
Never now. I never make it,
you are always just beyond me.
But each day my heart gets
back up to hope once more.
So trusting, so easily deceived,
just to be destroyed again
by mere internet-produced text
on a screen that
bleeds me dry
of the very
Will
To
Live.
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.... Sometimes one can get tired from constantly losing Hope.
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wow. just wow. thats exactly how i feel a lot of the time. great write
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i know the feeling..
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*sigh
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I know....
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Hood-Winked!
Please hang in there you will catch up with them. I know I have the same problem at times seem to never be on when the ones I care about are. Wonderful metaphors and emotions throughout. Amazing write
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Never lose hope dear... there is always hope you just need to reach for it, look in the right places for it.
This is a great write and you have been HOODWINKED yet once again by a member of the Poetic Bandits!
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HOODWINK !!!
This is a very touching, very poignant write, Nick. You've managed to express so soulfully, the feelings of lost hope regained, love unfulfilled. It seems to be a very personal piece and my heart goes out to you. Love via internet can be(and usually is) a very elusive, tenacious phenomonem (sic?) but beautiful just the same.
Fortunate the few who are able to eventually guide it to a real one on one, personal and upclose relationhsip. But there's reasons for everything in our lives so please don't be too discouraged. There's always something waiting just around the corner... a new love perhaps or this one coming to fruition, the freedom to go in a different direction, so many choices.
I've lived a long time and believe me when I tell you, nothing is all bad. We often find what we're looking for, what we want and need without even realizing it until it happens.
So put this special person in her own little nook in your heart and go on with your life... if it's meant to be, it will be.
An exceptionally good piece, my dear
Dee
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I like this
this is good,"but like an orphan my christmas doesn't come"...I like this metephore! Good write,I could feel the longing and desire! Good write!! -
wow
this is very sweet, very touching, great read and even beter write
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I don't know why ... I just keep coming back to this poem....
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Tired indeed
I like where this took me. Sensitive write, seems honest somehow, forth right? I cant see you but hear of you, that seems different somehow. You create an elusive effect all the way around.
Interesting, a little haunted.
Castaway
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I like it. You tell it like it is. lol. I find myself doing the same thing sometimes.
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This is really good. You just pretty much laid it all on the line. A refeshing sign of emotions.
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this is a really amazing poem. i mean i fully understand you hun this is great
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"But each day my heart gets
back up to hope once more.
So trusting, so easily deceived,
just to be destroyed again
by mere internet-produced text
on a screen that
bleeds me dry
of the very
Will
To
Live. "
haha, I know I'm such an arse for pasting that whole thing here... but what can I do - I so so so so so so so so so so love that little piece (I'm adding it to my quotes)
And about getting tired of losing hope... my love, if you can help me out of my problem, you can do it to.
Here are some words (your own)
"Someone who doesn't care about you is not worth caring for"
You know, whenever I'm down or anything .. I just have to remember those words, and since they come from you, I'm positive I can trust them.
In the end, if anything, I'm right here for you
NeveR ♥
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I like this. It's easy to feel.
I like how you listed the 'last seen...' times. - A nice touch.
Great poem.
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