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In the Beginning, and End

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I woke up this morning
with my stomach growling
like a hungry feeding dog
being pestered by a child
and so, I decided to fry an egg.

I grabbed one from the fridge
and looked at it, I mean,
really looked at it
for a moment
and thought about how

we all start as an ovum,
a cellular reproductive means
transformed
delivered and protected,
as well as rejected at times


and I thought of that
Salvador Dali painting,
the one where a man
was crawling out of
an egg.

On a more serious note,

isn’t it odd, how the egg,

a vessel, divinely designed

to protect its precious cargo,

is conversely represented

at death as a coffin, or urn?

 

Think about it;
we begin this life contained
and end it, entombed:
how very ironic.

Author notes

This is my abstract interpretation of life and death and the ironic parallel between the two subjects.

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  • Amy Meneses
    February 6, 2008

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    I agree with 'pollyjsmile' although I think you have a great idea here, this is too prosy and don't really work well as a prose poem to me, this would be amazing if you simply wrote about what happens to the man coming out of the egg instead of telling us. The first rule of creative writing is... show don't tell, I would love to hear your ideas projected through that lense, who is the man coming out of the egg and what is his fate? If you start there you will really have something amazing. Good luck!


  • Annexed Josephine
    February 5, 2008

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    this doesn't read like a poem to me but an analytical essay. if that's what you're going for that's cool- but to me this is all obvious and not 'abstract'. when i think abstract poetry- i think of e.e. cummings and bizzare writing like that- this doesn't do anything for me, but make me think of reading an essay. it's almost like youre writing a long joke. so... great job. i laughed.


  • BigE
    December 6, 2007
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    Genious

    Wow this was an amazing write. You nailed the topic, pondering the on something so simple such as breakfast and turned it into genious.
    "delivered and protected,
    as well as rejected at times"

    Straight up brilliant. I looked up that painting you mentioned and wow the genious of the painting matches your poem. Great work, thank you for sharing.

    Steven

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    There are various schools of thought re poetry,some say show don't tell,some only tell yet don't show,for me it may work with a balance of both,this was more tell than show but there was enough show.The internal rhyme would work well as spoken word.
    As for the Rooster coming first erm how was the he born? From a Hen surely or your theory would mean that the rooster gave birth to his self...
    Good luck in the contest with your thought provoking write.


  • painted dreams
    October 19, 2007

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    an interesting write, not quite what i was expecting, but entertaining none the less! thanks for your entry!


  • Glasyalabolas
    September 14, 2007

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    It's always surprising and interesting where our thoughts take us when we start to muse on what usually is the most mudane of objects or most regular of tasks.

    This piece shows this up very well. Good write and congrats on silver.


  • Trent plus pen
    August 28, 2007
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    Goodluck in my contest!
    Much love and respect.
    Trento!

  • Trent plus pen
    August 28, 2007

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    Are you joking?

    I didn't think poems evern got that good.
    Friggen amazing.

    I wont give any constructuve critisism because there's none to give. It's pretty much amazing haha.

    Love the language and style used.

  • March Muffin
    August 20, 2007
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    Terrifically written! I like the way you translate your thoughts onto paper. This seems like a stream of consciousness piece, only more polished. Your thoughts themselves are very good, and I really appreciate the way you separate the stanzas. Good write! I look forward to reading some of your other poetry.


  • Justified Inc.
    August 11, 2007

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    I like how you think!

    Encased and entombed, I'll have to remember that MJ!
    I loved it!
    Something to think about huh?
    ha ha
    castaway


  • michichoeret
    August 9, 2007
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    great

    luv the contained-entombed connection. smart pplay


  • Cat gold member
    August 9, 2007
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    i actually think you have a poem hidden inside the antics here- some really good thoughts that would be worth fleshing out when you no longer have the time constraints of a short contest-
    the stanza with reference to salvador dali alone is worth working into a tight piece-

    thanks for entering

    m


  • checkmate
    August 9, 2007

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    Brilliant!

    Ironic, indeed. This was brilliantly written! You have wonderful thoughts, on a great waveline- I loved the transits in between. And the structure and flow was just lovely!

    A very wonderful job! Ah. Thought provoking indeed. XD I just can't think now though- my brain seems to be fully drained!

    Great work here! Best of luck in the contest! Keep penning!

    Take care,
    Lonely Shouts

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