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A Fire Burns

A fire burns
inside of me
but the heat of you
makes me yearn

A simple touch
is like an
addicting drug
no matter the consequences i want more

 

I want you

beside me 

holding me

shaking, wishing, loving me

 

a simple touch

a mistake to some

is like gasoline

to the already existing fire

 

a kiss is like gasoline

mixed with water

finally putting it 

but leaving me watching more

 

each time

i want more

and more

you have the key

 

no one else can make

me this way

feeling like i need  rehab

because of one touch and a kiss

 

be a piece of me

have a part of me

leave me

and it will never be the same

 

A   f i r e    b u r n s     i n s i d e    o f   m e

j u s t    f o r    y o u

a n d    y o u

d o n t   e v e n    k n o w 

 

Author notes

I like this one a lot
but i do like most of my poems
but this is about a new person who i have liked for the longest tiime

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  • DeadlyTurnip
    September 11, 2007

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    Lol. S.E.R.I.O.U.S.L.Y. I can't believe you're only a year older than me. It's hard. Nice metaphor. I can totally relate here, still can't believe you're only a year older than me. Keep writing, love the username & picture.


  • NoWorldforTomorrow
    August 28, 2007

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    Are you seriously only 13?! 'Cause most thirteen year olds I know couldn't write something this good. The emotion is so strong and real, Awesome write.


  • Heartless Angel
    August 14, 2007

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    Cool lol, even if its about fire

    I wrote a poem called "The Fire" this is similar in explaining that burning want of someone in love. Be it the physical flames of passion as you describe here, or the burning wish of what you know cannot be attained, like my work. Either way, I love the use of fire in describing the passion and heat (should you pardon the puns) of natural, human affection (be it love or lust) I like the real life comparisons and the associations with fire. You make this a real, true BURNING like that the reader can physically feel. Wonderful work.

    Sincerely,
    Lillian Madeline


  • GiftedPsychosis gold member
    August 9, 2007
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    Some you like??
    ...
    ...
    ......
    [[Who??]]
    Anyhow, GREAT POEM!!
    Awesome job!!


  • Raining
    August 9, 2007
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    new person who i have liked for the longest tiime
    ......
    good poem!I like it!

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