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Fly- Away Mask

She sits and watches as the people pass by,
Dressed up in fancy clothes.
She smiles politely when they glance at her,
But it immediately fades when they go.

The mask is slipping off,
Why can’t she get it back?
The ends came untied
And the ribbons drifted away.
Silently reaching to grab it,
Her hands come just inches away from it,
Then it soars away.

She’s left,
Exposed on the sidewalk,
Left alone to face the world.
She feels naked,
But no one’s looking.

Glancing from side to side,
Trying to find some place to hide,
The tears run down her face,
As she angrily wipes them away.
Where are all these feelings coming from?

Wasn’t she safely hidden from the world?
How did this happen?

Anissa Sapp
8/9/07 12:43 AM

Author notes

"Sometimes you have to take the leap and build your wings on the way down."

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  • aligurl
    February 4, 2008

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    Oh I really liked this. SOmetimes the mask has to come off for the beauty underneath to shine. When you say the last few lines...

    "Where are all these feelings coming from?

    Wasn’t she safely hidden from the world?
    How did this happen?"

    I was a little disappointed. The beginning was amazing but then it builds and builds only to this. I think if you added more imagery... like the feelings or something. I'll try to think of some examples, but write now it's just not coming to me. I'll get back to you on it... thank you and good luck in my contest.


  • Phiona
    September 3, 2007

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    This is really nice, it's a bit different and a well written poem. Congratulations on a great write and good luck.


  • wanderingstarlet
    August 29, 2007
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    its different, i like it, but it didn't give me a distinct feeling...


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    Where are all these feelings coming from?

    Wasn’t she safely hidden from the world?
    How did this happen?

    this is hard as I want to find that corner
    to hide in for a while


  • koupolga
    August 17, 2007

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    Aww I love this poem, I think that to some extent anyone can relate to this. The mask that hides out true feelings and how sometimes it flyes away and leaves us vunrable. Thank your for your entry!


  • TheStupidLamb
    August 13, 2007

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    The ends came untied
    And the ribbons drifted away.

    Loved those lines. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    Excellent work! I really enjoyed reading this piece! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!



    -Steve-


  • LadysDragon
    August 12, 2007

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    Beautiful,I think alot of people hid behind a mask in the world,her's just fell off,and she felt exposed.Thank you and good luck!


  • islekine gold member
    August 9, 2007
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    Thanks for entering!


  • Hells Bells
    August 9, 2007

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    Wow as I said this is one of your best poems and I can't wait to read more of yours.I also love the describtion you had in this peice too.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 9, 2007
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    I love your take on the pic. Thank you for your entry.
    Soulful Woman

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