It all starts with one
It all ends with one
All I know and it's so unreal
I just watched you go
I tried so hard
But what do I have to show
I fell from so high
And I hit so hard
The scars left behind
Are here to remind me
That I put my trust in you
And I took this as far as I could
All on my own
And all that I had left
Was barely enough
To remain holding on
But we got so far
And I thought you should know
That I had put my trust in you
And I just watched you go
Please tell me what you think
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i love the way you worded this one. its sad, and it is something that i can relate to on a deep personal emotional level... very very good
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It's good, and it obviously is personal. Thought the Scars part to be a little close to "Scars" by Papa Roach. I never really got a feel for what happened, I thought there could have been a little more. -
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*shudder*
Can't say I know that song. I tried very successfully to avoid Papa Roach (sorry he's never been my cup of tea, always reminded me of Limp Bizkit...whom I hate with a passion)
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True
Its somethin i can relate to puttin trust in the wrong persone to catch you. It's always painful especially if u realize it just before u fall and cant catch yourself
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wonderful
it flows so perfect
and i can relate to this alot
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I actually like this quite a bit. There is a tendency for these types of poems to fall right into stereotypes and let the reader ( or at least me) lose interest very quickly but this kept me reading so I applaud that factor. I like the bit about the scars reminding you where you put your trust. Very interesting. Nicely written.
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