painting with henna
on back-skin
leaving out the colors
she'd admired,
as your hips
swung her through the sky
a brand was left
something simple
to remember her by
as we rounded bend
after bend
after bend
Author notes
of sorts
a reunion
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so this person was branded? literally, sounds as someone is getting a tatoo or being branded with a rod. bend after bend , this seems to go no where . that must be where you have to use your imagination. such vagueness here.
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Cool!
Simple is great! I felt so much more than words can describe. Thanks for the thoughts and words.
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Interesting text
It looks like simple text, but it has got a very captivating atmosphere, Marek -
great lovely write and a amazing read
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ah, this is gorgeous.. the simplicity gives it a lovely tone..
nice ending.. bend is a good word, has a movement to it, seems to make ths yllable bend.
Your writing is improved since the last time i read it
love yoo
jess
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i agree. so many turns in the word bend, it feels like the poem doesn't end right away.
i took quite a long break from writing, but i'm pleased with the come back, glad you are too.
love you,
S
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Hey this was really good!!! my only question, was in the second line is it supposed to say "back-skin?"
love ya sis!!!
KIM
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Yea, it is. I'm just trying little creative experiments with the poetry.
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