Follow me down into my spiral decent towards hell. I've never been good at saying no. Satin sheet staind skin never felt better, and the pattern you left on my heart won't fade. If tears could be fatal we'd both be long gone by now. My lips are swollen from praying for salvation. I'll split you fifty fifty for the grandeur of saying no first. Alcoholic nights spent passing time on the roof, waiting for the stars to fall. The long lingering kisses on the doorstep of your house, made every night worth living.
Now I sit in my car, across the street from your house, just conversing with my converse. Talking outloud to the rain, saying everything I always meant to say, but got too tongue tied to speak. If it wouldn't be too much trouble, could you build me rainbow to reach your skies. The skies in your beautiful world. The world where we still exist and where we still have a fighting chance
A contest entry
- No Vacancy (prompt) by RedAquarius.
1225 points, ended August 21, 2007, 16 entries
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You know, at first I was inclined to dismiss this due to its formatting but after I read it, I changed my mind. The format is perfect for this stream of consciousness feel. It starts off with a few overused images but when you get to "My lips are swollen from praying for salvation", I dunno, I just really got caught up in it and read through with held breath.
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woah. this is really cool. Like seriously. I love the way you put things in words and the way you describe the experience here, plus the title is cool too. Very strong and raw language. A very unique and interesting write. Awesome job!
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A strong use of words make this a very interesting read.
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