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Providential Piece

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Song of my soul, soul of song,
long to belong to true beau,
strong where most, weak, string along,
short to wrong conquer and, oh !
 

Hope for new scope, scope for hope,
never a bye line to toe,
rope with no strings, wings which cope
with winds of change strange, far range, so
 
dawn of my dawn she became,
fame of shared flame through time's flow,
drawn thorn as newborn glows game's aim,
name of my name who'll rhymes sow.
 
Bride to abide through the years,
tears clears, cheers as fearful fears go,
far and wide side by side soon appears
for hope nears when heart steers Cupid's bow.
 
Light of my light shines fair muse
whose views offer cues to bestow
bright blessings no wight could confuse,
clues choose to ignore or loose, glow
 
fires faith which aspires through tuned lyre
to translate runes ballooning to show
desires which inspire more desire,
enthuse, offer boon zephyr blow.
 
Waft of my weave I believe
receiving achieves to and fro
unsparing free sharing, two cleave
to each other, discover plateau
 
untouched and unsmutched for none grieve,
minds leave much behind more to know,
much more as two cores interleave
than first found as obbligato.
 
Flight through insight to delight
metamorphosis few undergo,
bright star once afar turning night
into day which all pray apropos.
 
HEART which HE ARTfully writes,
SHE ALl HEALS to unseal joy's chateau,
rite rightfully cited incites
an urge to merge, surge, long ago
 
foreseen to be queen, reconcile
surface smile with sacred undertow,
rile, bile, soothing to guileless beguile
while sentiments soft overflow.
 
Find mind behind features sublime
refusing narrow status quo
refusing to mime p[h]antomime, -
all acknowledge respect none forego.
 
Links my pen inks trace their source,
course, and force, as above and below  
in story on[e] glory discourse,
never coarse, no remorse ever know.
 
Dawn of my dawn she'll remain,
never wane, prove love vain, - sun and snow
come and go, she alone, once again
it is plain, easing pain, wards off woe.
 
Providential piece could reel out
more praise to the envy of time,
but you, reader, must out and about,
go in peace, we'll release you from rhyme.

 

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Providential piece inspired by the title of another poem written 5.38 - 7.02 a.m. 9 August 2007


cleave : come or be in close contact with; stick or hold together and resist separation

obbligato or alternative spelling obligato :
part of a musical score which must be performed without change or omission


unsmutched : unsullied, pristine

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  • hahaha loved how you ended this. Thanks for your entrylol

  • Melissa Burns
    March 21
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    Thank you for entering my humble little contest best of luck and thanks again!

  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 9

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    This is a beautifully done piece. I think the little roses are a bit distracting when you read it, but overall the piece is well laid out and a pleasure to read Great job.

  • Ellis gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    Excellent Writing

    Glad you released me!

    Sounds like a faithful couple!
    That is a good and happy thing!
    ------------


  • Perfectly Imperfect
    December 7, 2007
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    A very lovely piece of writing Well done and thank you for entering x

  • Blueskywonder
    November 29, 2007

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    This is a powerful piece of poetry... a most beautifully crafted piece of poetry.
    This was a journery to freedom

    Thankyou so much for taking the time to enter this beautiful piece into my contest... also good luck!


  • Room without doors silver member
    October 16, 2007

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    Outstanding

    I liked the way this poem flows. This is in your very own distinctive style. You create a myriad of images and your poetry is appealing to the ear with the intricate use of rhyme. The language is deft and I enjoyed the lyrical feel of this poem. Brilliant to read.

  • sshevak
    October 5, 2007
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    Beautiful!...

    Stunning, Yonassan... As usual, I envy your vocabulary and perfect techniche...

  • sshevak
    September 13, 2007
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    Touching..

    I'm still a bit too scattered to really comment, but I liked this piece very much. If it was written for me I'd be very happy..


  • literaryromantic
    September 9, 2007

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    I love the way you write. How words form others internally. I slip my lips around the rhyme and feel myself fall in love with the images you're creating for me in my mind.

    Thank you.


  • Artemis Gem
    September 7, 2007

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    such beautiful imagery and such lovely allusions! wow!


    far and wide side by side soon appears
    for hope nears when heart steers Cupid's bow.


    fires faith which aspires through tuned lyre
    to translate runes ballooning to show
    desires which inspire more desire,
    enthuse, offer boon zephyr blow.



    this piece is amazing, every word so beautifully put in place! I think this is one of my favourites on ap!
    keep it up!

    pegleg


  • Mrs.Keizor
    September 4, 2007

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    Wow

    You are one of the most advance poets that I have read on here, with is a COMPLIMENT! Its refreshing to read a masterpiece like yours, it makes me better apppreciate the poet and poetry itself. Bravo, I really enjoyed reading this Sir.


  • Temple Fire
    September 3, 2007

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    very long winded poem, you do a awesome job though with it and obviously have a very talented pen and muse wonderful work

    Temple~


  • poet girl
    September 2, 2007

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    The play on words is just wonderful. "Heart," and,"He artfully," is just so neat. This is a beautiful love poem. I loved the rhyme. Pen on, poet.


  • janejainejayne gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    Perfection!

    Half way through this, I began to sing it! I hope you don't mind. I wish I could sing it to you. It is a beautiful song in my mind. The words need to be sung! Jane

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  • Amera gold member
    August 20, 2007

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    I am so glad to meet you! This is the first poem I have read of yours and I am very impressed. I think I can learn a lot from you.

    Love,
    Amera ♥

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  • montez gold member
    August 17, 2007

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    Superb

    Onomatopaeic alliteration.
    A wonderful poem.
    Well deserving 3 claps, so, here they are..
    Robin (pity my surname's not Jonathan!)

    . Rewarded 4


  • KnightOfShadows
    August 12, 2007

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    A beautifully written poem! Really long yet you kept my interest through the whole thing! my favorite part was "HEART which HE ARTfully writes,
    SHE ALl HEALS to unseal joy's chateau,
    rite rightfully cited incites
    an urge to merge, surge, long ago" I loved the capital letter it gave it much more power...anyway great job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!



    -Steve-

  • Dirka
    August 11, 2007

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    The Poet has proven beyond all doubt that he is a Master in writing an awesome piece of pure pleasure.

    Thank you for sharing this with me.

    Dirka

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  • Room without doors silver member
    August 10, 2007
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    Outstanding

    I loved how this poem managed to combine a lyrical feel with a sense of modern poetry and the remarkable use of interior rhyme that gave the poem a wonderful depth and sophistication.
    fires faith which aspires through tuned lyre
    to translate runes ballooning to show
    desires which inspire more desire,
    enthuse, offer boon zephyr blow.
    This poem shows your ability to be creative with language and really explore creativity within your poetry. An outstanding example showing skill and dexterity with verse that is appealing to the ear. Brilliant to read.

    . Rewarded 8


  • Birgitte silver member
    August 10, 2007
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    "Light of my light shines fair muse
    whose views offer cues to bestow"
    Those lines really stuck in my mind while reading this piece. It is very long, and usually it's very hard to keep my attention for this long poems, but you did it. I'm really impressed with it, it's so well written!

    One thing - please read through the rules, you didn't quite follow them!

  • Night Hope gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    "Dawn of my dawn she'll remain,
    never wane, prove love vain, - sun and snow
    come and go, she alone, once again
    it is plain, easing pain, wards off woe."

    Ahhh, this is a gorgeous penning, dear Scribe...No wonder Marianne is so pleased, my Friend. Wonderful sentiments woven throughout each line. I especially like the first stanza, as well. Such talent you display. Beautifully done for a deserving soul.

    . Rewarded 8


  • Providence
    August 8, 2007
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    I am both humbled and honored that my simple offering of words inspired a poem of such magnitude.

    Your mind is luminous.

    If I could give you more then three bunny ears I would.

    So in their place allow me to bow and bid you...

    Namaste

    Marianne

    . Rewarded 6

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