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Torn Apart






She tore apart the parts of me

I always thought would always be

constant - constantly calling me

on the bullshit I would toss about

so easily to other women -

what the fuck did I know

about love or loving?

Now I belong to one woman

and I never thought I could be owned,

let alone loved or wanted -

hell, she says she needs me and

that will scare me always

(but never as much as the thought

that I might not be there when

it all falls apart - it always does).

I'm the scoundrel, bounder, cad -

I can't do this, but

I have to - I have to

hold her close and say things

I never thought I'd mean.

Life is like this, isn't it?




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  • poet girl
    August 27, 2007
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    this is so true.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 25, 2007
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    yes it is, and there is not a damn thing we can do about


  • NoIQ gold member
    August 15, 2007

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    I suspect the part of this that acknowledges present love is an honest self-reflection, and that fact means that the introspective indictment that the poet makes of himself in other parts is, in the end, just a solemn look to the past. It's easy to find ourselves trapped by the realities of life, when it is its freedoms that constantly distract us. I joke a great deal on this site about what might be called "anti-monogomy" and hedonism, and as you might guess I came very close to doing so again here after reading this excellent piece. However, I have a sense I know what inspired the work, and I thought better of making light of it. There is something about real love that should be appreciated in sincerity at times. There's always another day and other poems for me to make light of subjects such as this, but I just somehow don't want to now. Beautiful work Scott.

  • Apparition
    August 11, 2007

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    Excellent

    The whole poem struck a strong cord with me. After all, how exciting would life be if we didn't find ourselves in places we never thought we'd venture? Did love the way you worked the words...wove them together...tightly braided the thoughts so they would stay in the readers mind. Then made us think with that wonderful question at the end. Strong...and stable...no doubt like the person you never thought you'd need.

    Awesome.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    My tongue slipped a few times in the first stanza but its because I have a headache - I loved the feel of the slight tongue twister though.

    That ending stanza says it all doesn't it. How often do we all say things that we don't mean, but then the time comes and we are afraid to say the things that had once come so easily - this time its different, we mean them.

    I am happy for you Scott. (And I always end up spelling your name scoot first!)


  • EvilKate
    August 9, 2007
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    Yes. Life is ... I think ...


  • Abscessed
    August 9, 2007
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  • Annalise
    August 9, 2007
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  • Heart Sutra
    August 8, 2007
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  • Saffron gold member
    August 8, 2007
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