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Exile of Forgiveness

The window pane, obscures my view-
Or is it the settling neglect, residing.
Carefully hanging around- my collar;
Restricting my every breath, of LIFE?

The silent stare out the window;
Only leads to the purge of the streets.
Thick with the unforgivens-
Wind howling them at me.

Forgiveness dwells inside the shell-
Acquired, as the inhaled smoke,
Settles on the window, obscuring;
The exile of forgiveness.


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Written September 9th, 2003

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  • Woodland Nymph
    May 1, 2007
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    we are so hard on ourselves.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 4, 2005
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    Good poem..incessant

    Oh, this is why you are my favorites list. "Thick with the unforgivens-
    Wind howling them at me."
    Great write!


  • silver bugs
    May 4, 2005
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    This is brilliant. Short but powerful and thought provoking for sure. I liked the first stanza best though the ending was quite strong also. Very original. I like it. Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest and best of luck!
    ~Lana
    Edited on May 04, 4:06 because 'Typo.'.


  • Lurie
    October 8, 2003
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    I am bound by them all,
    their anger and hatred feed off of my soul
    and still I live...though I be in hell,
    at the grinding of thir jaws
    and the gnashing of their teeth,
    I still live.
    FOrgiveness has been drowned and my will
    has been given up for I am no longer who I was
    for I am now
    the soul
    of the
    un~forgiven.    ..............Laura


    WOW Muddy....You inspired me!!!!! Thank you!