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Sapphire

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Sapphire

ages and ages waiting for her release
she longs to be cherished by royal ladies
yearning to adorn fingers and throats of queens
the sapphire lady

an azure crystalline structure extracted
from within the sour belly of the mine
has disguised her beauty hiding it in stone
silently she waits

her rich blue tone borrowed from the sky and sea
and the aura of light and depth of beauty
lends a glow to the cleavage of a lady
feminine secret

 

 

 

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Loose Sapphic Form
“Sapphic” and “Loose Sapphic” forms:  Mairi bheag

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    I had to click on this because Sapphire is my birthstone, and I find gems in general to be so fascinating.
    This was gorgeous. Exquisite.
    Seriously, you are so talented. I'm amazed you aren't already winning the highest awards and signing autographs in bookstores all over the world.


  • scorpio rising
    August 12, 2007

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    I must say....you are an amazing woman

    I just find you so interesting and knowledgeable

    "Ages and ages waiting for her release"

    The first line really caught my intention and the rest captivated me


    Always amazed....



    Keep them comin!

    Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    pretty. pretty write, I love gems and minerals, always have. Dxxxx loves garnets by the way, I'd give her some beautiful garnet and Peridot jewelry if her husband would not mind, but....funny how they get at times huh?? Yeah, tina's as well, sigh...

    Anyhow, I saw one at San Carlos, on the reservation ,that was just breathtaking, Garnet, peridot and polished hematite. would look marvelous on her.


  • ellipsist
    August 11, 2007
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    beautiful imagery... I like the

    stark contrast of the second stanza, especially!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    August 11, 2007

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    The form is an adornment in itself....very elegant
    I love how you give a voice to a crystal,
    then make it a part of feminine mystique.
    Enjoyed! Blue


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    My favorite gem...other than you

    Outstanding form, as always, and
    an intricately beautiful weave of
    poetic wisdom.

    Love, Lane


  • Desire gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    Wow!!


    I remember inhaling this form in another one of Your pieces~ Wow~
    Wonderful againnnnnnnnn~
    Love the presentation but also the message You convey in this piece
    The words: sour belly ...
    just grabs...
    also words: sapphire lady
    Woooooooooo hooooooooooo

    Best wishes to You
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Swan song gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    I love sapphics and of couse you are very good at them. I am not much of a jewelry person, I love rocks but I can see why Sapphires are so cool and you caprtured it all


  • Lord Dracon
    August 9, 2007
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    Very beautiful poem, it was a joy to read, thanks for sharing!


  • captain howdy
    August 9, 2007

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    "an azure crystalline structure extracted
    from within the sour belly of the mine"

    "her rich blue tone borrowed from the sky and sea"


    Absolutely love these lines! Perfect poem! Sapphires are so beautiful! You have captured their beauty very well!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    August 9, 2007

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    The ice blue and gentle feel of the stone of the heavens You have brought it to life my little one and given it soul with great beauty...Thank you so much for sharing


  • Bazza
    August 9, 2007

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    Absolutely beautiful.

    You have sensuously described the Ceylon Blue sapphire with beautiful words that is the equal of the gem's beauty. have you ever held a AAA Ceylon Blue in the palm of your hand ?? It is an unforgettable experience and as a collector of such wonders, the thrill and admiration never wain. The colours of sapphire are incredible especially the padparadscha (meaning lotus blossom) for they are a pinkish orange and have to be seen to be believed, while of course the red sapphire is called a ruby, being of the same family. You have done justice to these beautiful gems of love with your wonderful words.
    Barry


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    August 9, 2007

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    Very well written indeed. Full of description yet not just an informative piece it's very creative and I enjoyed the read very much.

    Lil


  • StarEyes
    August 9, 2007

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    This is beautiful my friend!! I love most jewels, and well this is a jewel in its own right! Best of luck in this contest!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 9, 2007
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    Excellent poem - it sparkles!

    As I go through the entries, I am afraid I am being dreadfully picky about syllable count - heaven knows I have to do something to grade all the poems - and here I am doubtful about line 6. (Jings, running a contest is the quickest way to lose friends!)


    • Amera gold member
      August 9, 2007
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      Must be your accent, this is what the syllable counter says:
      Derived Data
      Words/Sentence 8.0
      Syllables/Word 1.38
      Syllables/Sentence 11.0
      Letters/Syllable 2.82
      Letters/Word 3.88
      Letters/Sentence 31.0

      http://www.wordscount.info/hw/syllable.jsp

      I'll withdraw


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        August 9, 2007
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        It could be... I am counting it over and over and only getting 10, which surprised me when I realised it was one of yours. I have had a long convo with ea and another with peteskid on this very subject, which seems to have bedvilled this contest. I am sorry if I have done you or anyone else an injustice.


        • PerVirtuous
          August 9, 2007

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          Just to chime in because I do that kind of thing, everyone where I live pronounces sour as a two syllable word. Perhaps it is an English-American thing?


          • Mairi bheag gold member
            August 9, 2007

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            Yes you do, Allan, and you are very welcome - I think you're right, and others have remarked upon this. Here by Dundee it's "soor", a single syllable even with the rolled "r".

            I take your point and Amera's.


        • Amera gold member
          August 9, 2007

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          This is the word in question:
          sour (sou-r) (sou-er)

          Dictionary.com
          http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/sour%20


          • Mairi bheag gold member
            August 9, 2007
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            Yes, I thought that was the one which was causing the problem. Almost everywhere a single syllable in the UK, except perhaps for a swathe across Yorkshire, Lancashire, and Derbyshire (in the latter county, they say "moo-wun, joo-wun, soo-wun" also).


  • PoetsAngel
    August 8, 2007

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    The form Queen strikes again! This is simply a gorgeous piece Sis, you amaze me


    Cathy
    ♥♥♥♥♥


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    What an eloquent penning, the Sapphire is a stunning stone, sparkling and eyecatching...like your write lovely work Missy ~Tia


  • PerVirtuous
    August 8, 2007
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    Very nice. I like the metaphor. Very feminine and suggestive. mmmmmmmmmm. I like.


  • HaleyMary
    August 8, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Wonderful imagery. The last stanza made me think of how people can be like jewels to people, to cherish someone, rather than an actual jewel like a sapphire. Good luck in the contest.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Beautiful,

    Excellent write, wonderful imagery, and I appreciate such a wonderful read.. Thanks for sharing..all the best in all you do, peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • FallingTwilight
    August 8, 2007

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    Interesting piece. I love the imagery and choice of words. It's lovely. Good luck in the contest,

    FallenPoeticAngel

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