Why beset this vessel
Helm to port and starboard
You, who should be shipmate?
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Beset is a nautical term which means to surround a vessel by ice so that control of the helm is lost.
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i love this piece...reminds me of POTC..at first i thought it was a haiku,but reading it a bit more i realize it wasn't..nice job w/ the word choice
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short and precise
Words speak for them self, but the ice becomes the shipmate to hold this ship locked in its arms.
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Puzzlin'.. -
Shipmates
Tacking, way lacking,
gains leeway for taking stock -
thus not attacking -
even though it's short and simple, you can derive many different meanings from it if you think about it.
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Very interesting. The simplicity is the first thing that strikes me as I stare at this work. The next is the resonance you manage to evoke.
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well this is certainly thought provoking... ive read it several times now and short as it may be its extremely brilliant the imagery is excellent ... it seems to take you off into your very own wonderland well done love glad to see you write something xxxx
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I LIKE IT as I'M A LOVER OF THE SEA!
This would fit nicely into one of my LITTLE STAR BOOKS and inparticular to the fourth one which I'll be working on SOON called MUTINY on 'THE LITTLE STAR". Thanks for sharing this with me - and I hope to see many new pieces from you soon, shipmate! Perhaps you'll let me use it (credited to you, of course) when I finish BOOK THREE in a couple of weeks and a new voyage gets underway!
Peace & Love!
Earl
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Oh I like this.. it is short sweet and just gives the reader a wanting desire to come aboard and sail away...
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