It's wings were silent
so very still, I look into it's eyes
to grasp something other than
cement, and flattened wings.
Author notes
True story.
This is not from the point of view from a bird,
but it was inspired by one.
Please comment/critque.
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Fly like a bird by Sonja.
1210 points, ended August 25, 2007, 17 entries
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sweet like the nectar its trying to get. why didnt i read this before? iam reading alot of your old work today cause i feel like it.
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This is a good trial to see and to grasp something new from the birds eyes. Fly, poet, fly...
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Sad write, but very good. It is different. Nice pen. Keep writing, I want to read more.
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Thank you, I really appriciate it!
peace to all ~flight
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The sound of silence and the power of purity which are dwelling inside the soul flowing out of this poem. Short, but brilliant.
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Thank you very much.
peace to all ~flight
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i'm not really sure what comment i should make, because reading this poem has everything in my head shaking, you know what this poem make me think of, the statue of david, strong and sample.
good job
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I'm glad you saw strength,
the situation was so odd, seeing a
humming bird so still, I have often wondered
what they would look like without that
constant hovering dream of wings around them,
now I know...so wierd.
Plus, my friends have always told me if I were an
animal I'd be a humming bird.
Thank you so much for the comment!
peace to all ~flight
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