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- Death's Valley -

 

 

A life without love,  windows are shone tinted
behind darkened lashes, covered curtains
to the Soul's sanctuary

which huddles in a corner’s crease, vacant 
under duress from feathers stripped
off back where blue veins wallow

in shallow pools dried of liquid solution,  leftover
after salted diamonds for another to acquire;
splintered pieces picked out of muddied bed

where a gratuitous Garden of Eden
once flourished,  honey flavored sustenance
yet the winter’s climate controlled Kismet
to an extent. (Kept the bees away)

Sacred foundation brittle as breath
siphoned to strike at heart, weakest link
and elixir drained to drink by mouth
of Demon. (with Mortal sins massaged into flesh)

Mind tempted,  stirred to stray,  think self
voiceless, spiritless also worthless with integrity
washed
downstream within depths of abyss
into Death Valley where other victims congregate;
have their skeletal remains scattered,
used as manure in Hades.









 

 

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  • poetryality silver member
    August 10, 2007

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    A very vivid account of what life would be like if there was no love in the world. For certain your title tells us how it would be. You move on with each stanza to share wonderful metaphors with the reader. I read this with a slow pace as Jeff did and that caused it to be melancholy, which is just fine because that's what life would be without love. An exquisite poem.

    Thank you for this entry and the best to you.


    Much LOVE ♥

    Renee


  • Kindredblood
    August 9, 2007

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    A life wihtout love, thats me,
    Your poem unraveled slowly for me, so i was able to let my mind relax and create some dark images, and others lighter, though death holds a chill to me, hard to explain, the poem was beautifully penned or typed as the case maybe, no matter how many times i read it, I still enjoyed the poem as a whole, excellent write, so strong so deep, and such a privilage to view such magic you have shared here.


  • Swan song gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    Wow I read this aloud three times I read it at mid speed then fast, then very slow. I loved it very slow because the images could formulate and your words of wine could be savored as I spoke them.


  • soulfultia gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    This was a lovely flowing pen that dropped ink here! I agree with Amera...the lashes being curtains to the soul is a creative and wonderful analogy! Beautiful work my pleasure as always to read ~Tia


  • Amera gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    This is terrific! You paint an image so powerful. I love the analogy of lashes being curtains to the soul. It's true; if they are drawn then we shut out love.

    Love,
    Amera ♥


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 8, 2007

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    BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN!!!!!

    I am able to associate with this so well right now. Life does often feel as if it has been lacking in love and friendship. I hope I and everyone else can overcome this and find our happiness once more.


  • penman gold member
    August 8, 2007
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    Excellent

    Oh my sweetness, such a powerful poem. Really touches to the core. Best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    August 8, 2007

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    Holy Smokes Girl!!! What a read this one is!!! Yikes, the images you have created in ones mind as the words are read....... Just amazing!!!!! Best of luck to you in this contest!!!!

    and much love

    Nettie

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