She's an imperfect girl.
living in an imperfect world.
tears in her eyes.
scarrs on her wrists.
thats nothing new,either is the fact thier all beacuse of you.
No ware to go.
No place to turn.
Dead on the inside.
Barley living on the out.
Thoughts of the razor running wild in her mind.
She knows without doubt it will releave her pain at once.
She's wanting somthing thats not thier.
She's simpley needing someone to really care.
Desperitly losing control.
Simpley ready to give in.
Tightly grasping the razor in her hand.
So simpley wanting to feel the sharp point feed on her batterd flesh.
She feels the need to see her blood so quickly gush from her wounds.
Her blood gushing and tears flowing.
Her heart racing.
Her pain quickly escaping.
She's an imperfect girl living in an imperfect world.
She has it all the fake smile and laugh.
The broken heart and batterd ego.
Set out facing life on her own.
The razor as her only escape.
She's the imperfect girl.
Set out to help change the world.
Please tell me what you think
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Once you fix up the many spelling errors ( I was trying to point out the ones I noticed..) This is a really good piece.. Perhaps you can add a back ground to help add to the tone of the piece.. It will help a lot... But still.. A nice piece.. One I find rings true, seeing as I was in the same situation merely two years ago and still find myself having flashes of it.. Like last night.. But that is neither here or now..
However, if you'd like someone to talk to, please now that I am here for you.
-Danneh
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