silence isnt something you can just fake
its something that you have to feel
strong enough to make your bones want to break
[but weak enough to make your heart fill up with meaningless promises && hollowed out memories]
you can listen to your own breath
feel your heart make it's pitter && patter sounds
silence makes you feel alive
but dead at the same damn time
[&&you dont understand what is happening anymore, life just seems to be passing you by at such a steady rate that youre left in the past with a whirlwind of dust and debris blocking your view]
too tired to change your fate you deny the possibility
of a single soul meant to be connected to another
silent halls lead to silent rooms
to you alone in an endless cone of silence
you did this to yourself
Author notes
I have absolutely no clue where this came from.
Whats so over.
Also, I'm not even sure if it fits what you were asking for so feel free to DQ it if you don't like it bby.
Dancing Marionette
A contest entry
- SheLookedInsideAndScreamed by Exodus.
600 points, ended August 19, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [LoveAQuickie] by whiterabbit..
450 points, ended August 18, 2007, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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I think this could do with a comma or two, and a few apostrophes but I loved some of your descriptions, very vivid and capturing. The last line, as a stand alone or as an ending to the piece works beautifully, thank you
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[&&you dont understand what is happening anymore, life just seems to be passing you by at such a steady rate that youre left in the past with a whirlwind of dust and debris blocking your view]
you're soo good at this
and i envy you
endofstory
:]
♥♥♥♥♥
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Nowhere to Something
This may have come from no where,but thats where the best poems come from,great job,and good luck!
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I love this bby. It's so wonderful and describes those feelings so damn perfectly. I would've never thought to write something like this. Wow, silence is so powerful it's eerie if you really think about it. It's something that scares me but that I can also find comfort in. Amazing.
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I envy your ability to write such beautiful and true poems. This is stunning.
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I dunno where it came from either, but I'd like to go there. Please. & get inspired. Please. I need a muse!!!
this is kick ass. I alwaaaays love what you do with your brackets. You use them intentionally (which is how they should be used) and your purpose is really clear with them. & Then they accomplish that goal.
I love this idea about silence... & the depth of it. it's so true. there are silences that you can FEEL deep down in your toes. [& those are the worst!]
I loved this piece, especially this line:
"[but weak enough to make your heart fill up with meaningless promises && hollowed out memories]"
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thank you bby.
im pretty sure it was silent around me.
i do my best thining in silence and listening to some music.
well
thats not really silent but whatever.
and i am so glad you like my brackets, i always fear im doing to much or too little. or just too much of something.
that means a lootttt to me.
♥;
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oh darling...
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thank you bby [:
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Wow...this completely describes how I've been feeling this past two weeks. Dang, you found the words before I did. Beautiful as always.
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