When dusk falls and darkness enfolds
Moon beams sooth the mind and the body
Tired of the mundane, longs for sleep
Soul stirs, waiting for the body to slumber
~*~
Once the mind closes and body slumbers
The soul is free to roam in the cosmic space
Weaving among meteoroids and twinkling stars
Brighten the skies, cosmic dust sparkles
~*~
Celestial beauty enchanting the soul terra
Hither to held captive in darkness
Weaves its way thro' the constellations
Wondering at the peace and harmony
~*~
The terrestrials seem ignorant of the bliss
Pervading the celestial family as they spin and
Whirl through the haze of nitrogenous gases
Perfection radiating in their solemn ways
~*~
The beauty of divine creation and its perfection
Enchanted this soul hungry for knowledge, who
Learned his lessons and thanked the creator
For the wonder of his flawless creations
~*~
Aurora found him deeply relaxed and refreshed
His knowledge of the night fulfilling to his soul
Yet his mind questioned the wisdom of the chaos
Ruining the divine creation and destroying them
~*~
Copyright © 08/05/2007 Poet Raja
Author notes
Words used: meteoroids, stars, skies, cosmic dust, Celestial, constellations, terrestrials, nitrogen(ous), divine,
Aurora
A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is so wonderfully sensual and romantic. It brings a sense of oneness to the soul and the imagery is truly a marvel. You once again have me in awe of your talents. I adore this :D
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very nice, the thoughts and questions are very evident in this piece so A+ on hitting the theme, I also do like the flow and the line breaks are well done, punctuation would have been good, but not nessasary for such an imaginative piece well done.
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wow! that poem made me tired lol.
no It was a great poem. the rythmn wasnt fantastic but I loved the description and the way you have constructed this piece
well done.
and thankyou for entering
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Awesome and thought provoking
I loved this poem and agree that we do not treasure the gift of life and this world that we have been given.
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Ah... to feel the peace of this write again would be heaven itself. Perhaps it would give me a second wind as well
now... if I could only find my way back!
Wonderful write Joel.
s and best of wishes always... ~Genie~
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Liked the way you used these words in the verses - good flow and vivid visuals in these lines - enjoyed the read.
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Alternate reality in the deep sleep state takes the soul into the outer limits for sure. You've described it well in this piece. It works for me except when it journeys into the frightful abyss of nightmares.Ha! I like the way it ends in rested peacefulness.
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