In love and all the rest, Attachment’s seen at its best
attachment’s found at its best when freedom dove returns to nest
Like sea’s bound onto her shore, As above bleeding greed
she’ll count on grains forever more is simple feeding need
For against strong blows that strain, Like love in falling rain
land stands still again... A feather flies towards ground again
07-08-07
A contest entry
- Love? by rsheafer.
700 points, ended December 24, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i enjoyed reading this poem a lot. it makes me think differently about " attachment "
nicely done !
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lol love your words... + hmmm a series of attachments huh? dangerous ground (according to eastern philosophies ie. Buddhism that is)... thanx 4 ur unique comment! <3 Alex
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Attached to my pen, a hand that guides the flight..... across the pounded ground up pulp of trees I never climbed,
yet still I write....- love your attachments, it could make a great series for you~~~Artis
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To me it demonstrates the best side of the meaning for the word "Attachment." The drawback to attachment is when it becomes a situation for dependency. If a determination can be made from the one being attached that they can still function as an individual, then it's the best of both worlds. For that in turn can be called "Loyalty." I know my next relationship, that is the key element I seek most. I could love someone out of this world, but if loyalty is not there...it will never move any further beyond a true friendship. Definitely an interesting write.
Ted E
PS: It made me confess whay I deem important in a relationship
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Thank u 4 the clear insight... and i think you're very right on again!
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I don't have a special someone who is actually mine, so the "love thing" is hard to do at the moment(lol). However, you are very lovely and genuine with your sweet comments!
Ted E
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If you notice earlier on (in my comments) i had no clue what i was trying to say in this poem... it was just a "feeling" captured... but now that you mention "eternity of commitment"... i suppose i did have in essence a worthwhile LT relationship situation set in the back of my mind... maybe i did know what i meant but was just too scared to admit to such feelings up forth... lol
btw, welcome to AP!
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very great piece provided here you spoke very well about situations invovlving eternity of commitment i want to wish you good luck in my contest
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Wow! amazing is what I said immediately I read this poem. I wish that this world has got another wonderful poet from Asia. It is just but a great piece of poetry. Keep writing such wonderful writes.
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I love the format, that's is the main ingrediant in making this poem so powerful. You did an excellent job of being creative with it all...peace n' love, JT
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I really think that the format is interesting and different...that's really good...the words are nice and it's well put together
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Nice write!
Very unusual way of laying it out and I found myself reading it the wrong way at first but it was very intresting.
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This was a very interesting way to combine your words, I think it was unique in a way that gave it even more than just its words. Of course, the words were good too, I liked the simplicity of the rhyming, and how it just seemed to all fit together nicely. Your second last stanza stands out the most, in my opinion, just because. Very well done, I am glad to come across such an original layout, and some very well put words. All the best, KP
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Thank u KP... glad u liked second stanza cos i really wasn't too sure bout it... lol^^
In fact, this was one i (interestingly enough) only came to understand what the heck i was trying to say completely a couple of days back... like of course i knew what i meant in general, but finally i was able to apply it to life & me + see why i even had to write it to begin with~
All d best 2 ya 2 - Alex
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wow. I've never seen this writing structure before. very impressive, having the two seperate columns, each with their own end-rhymes.
simply beautiful writing, too.
-Pap.
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Thank u 4 such kind words Papy & clappies! It's not an official "form" sort of poem or anything... just something i came up with cos the words happened to fit... haha
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No prob! It's just that have trouble coming up with new stuff on the spot... that's why i asked + kinda felt this was related too... but really, i totally understand if you want "freshness"... Thank you for actually checking my piece out + the clappies~ so c ya round ^^
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This is a wonderful poem with brilliant imagery. I enjoyed reading it very much. I know this isn't what you wanted to read, but though this poem is very great, I'm not going to change the rules for it. If you want to, I would enjoy it very much to read a fresh poem by you. This probably isn't much consolation... I'm sorry.
Still, fantastic poem.
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Thanx 4 taking notice. Honestly, I don't even know where this came from! The idea just decided to pop into my head and right back out onto screen without my getting the chance to understand the feelings behind it quite enough. So you might just see something in me through this that I'm not yet aware about! hmmm i wonder i wonder~
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This is a very interesting and unique
form you have written with. I think
you did a great job with it and thank
you for sharing it here! Keep up the
wonderful work and welcome to the site!
I hope to read more from you very soon!
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Did it? It's meant to be two columns. Thanx 4 taking the time 2 read^^
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Wow. very interesting....the form kinda threw me off...but after a few more times reading it, im pretty sure i got it.
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Interesting poem and choice of form.
Great write.
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Thank u kbug
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