Throwing daggers at a wall,
as it it thuds, DAMN IT ALL!!
"you looked at me with hopeful eyes"
Hopeful eye? or hidden lies?
"Eyes for an eye, tooth's for a tooth"
Not even Jesus spoke more truth.
THUD
There's your picture split in two,
sometimes I wish it were actually you.
"Not tears of water, but of pain"
another dagger for you bane.
"I never knew what destruction he'd bring."
should've known with a un-joint ring...
THUD
There's the letter you wrote back,
"I guess fate love and hate had a play in that."
that being a fuel for bonfire height,
with "flames that licked the stars that night"
THUD
"The heartache, the pain, the anger and more"
shit...missed his face and hit the door...
dislodging the dagger, and trying again,
now crying away for the insane.
As the dagger hits, a smug look on,
two eyes caught upon the prong.
Author notes
The phrases in quotation marks (") are quotes from previous poems I've written
"you looked at me with hopeful eyes"
"Eyes for an eye, tooth's for a tooth"
-You (I don't think this is online.)
"Not tears of water, but of pain"
-Tears and the Rain
"I guess fate love and hate had a play in that."
"I never knew what destruction he'd bring."
-She Left Him with the Thought he'd never turn back
"flames that licked the stars that night"
-If
"The heartache, the pain, the anger and more"
-Astrael
Title: -Throwing Daggers
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Comments
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WOW. This is incredible. I loved it. It had imagery, metaphorical meaning, and anger. The hatred you expressed in this piece was heartwrenching. I liked the element of mixing in things from other poems you've written. I do that often and I think it's very clever. lol. Good luck!
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i am lost for words.... all i can say is wow!
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I loved this piece, m'dear! It was packed with metaphors, imagery, and emotion! The vivid detail is rarely seen within poetry and I loved the devices you used. Your rhyming was not forced and I am grateful to have come across this poem, though might change my mind if you throw a dagger at me!
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I laughed
This one actually made me laugh for some reason. It sounds like a monologue you find in movies, especially black comedies (like Withnail And I). The way it was written reminded me of actor Rik Mayall, it just sounds so much like something he would say!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one Midnight, I couldn't find any faults with it, and that made it even more enjoyable.
"shit...missed his face and hit the door..."
That is the best line, hands down. That's the one that really got me in the state of 'ROFL' becuase it is a feeling I can relate to very easily, having been in situations like it before.
Good write Midnight, keep it up!
SaintJimmy
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