Mirages take shape,
The sun heats up, the night cools,
Deserts make great men.
A contest entry
- The Desert by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended August 24, 2007, 11 entries
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Oh, that last line really makes this interesting. I don't usually care for haikus, but this one really makes the reader think, and I love that. Thanks for entering.
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perfect
i've yet to learn how to pen a haiku with such depth and meaning. Maybe i can learn from you. Nicely done
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burning haiku......
I feel the intense heat with this desert haiku. I love to read and write haiku.
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Nice
i wish you all the best in the contest, great write, and wonderful imagery, awesome poetry... you rock!
peace
Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Wonderful Haiku. Nice job with the contest prompt!
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i'm not always a great fan of haikus because people tend to use them as an excuse for providing a small idea - this is different. there are three realities here (the illusionary mirage, the physical temperature, and man's existence with and connection to the environment), all competing for space, and so you even get the limitations of the form to mean something. i like
i don't think you need the apostrophe in 'heats' though, it looks like a verb. congrats, hex
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