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Confession>>>>

Here's a cofenssion
coming from a soul
wary of its mistakes,
blackened like coal
by the sins its done,
apology its goal.

I've annoyed everyone
at some poin or another.
Be it friends, cousins
father, mother or brother,
Knowingly hurt so many
separate or grouped together.

I'll try to change myself,
I won't hurt anymore.
No more innocent hearts
will I ever make sore.
Punish me or forgive,
I'm guilty to the core.

I'm really sorry people.
I've caused irritation, pain.
Its reaped me disgust,
anger, curses and disdain.
I've learned I was wrong,
At last I've become sane.

Please tell me what you think

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  • iMJ
    August 11, 2007

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    COOL!

    Like I've already told you.... it's great... except for the spelling mistakes... focus on that more, right?


  • Annalise
    August 8, 2007

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    You have quite a few misspelling littered throughout this piece. Its/it's has been confused, in some cases the rhythm seems off, and the content seems self-centered.

    Though-- all in all a decent read.


    • Greaks
      August 8, 2007
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      thanx ...

      will try to make my next work betta ...

      its supposed to be self-centerd though ...hehe

      thanx a lot ...


  • Entwining Beauty
    August 8, 2007
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    wonderfully expressed poem, it was really fantastic

  • Stolen Identity
    August 8, 2007

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    Amazing-Ness!!

    Whao...that poem so describes me!! I loved it!! Except for the fact that I'm still insane!! It was really good, couldn't have done better myself.

    • Greaks
      August 8, 2007
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      INSANE .eh??

      well

      whatta say ....

      u think i'm gone sane??

      thats just for the sake of rhyme... i'm not so sure i'm sane ... nobody in their sane mind wud admit they're sane....hehhee

      thanx though....:-)


  • Blueskywonder
    August 8, 2007
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    also can i say don't be to hard on yourself because we all make mistakes

  • Blueskywonder
    August 8, 2007

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    This is an sindere expression of honest shame
    showing great strength and courage to admit ones faults lets say... is a great leap forward for your personal growth. I'm sure anyone hearing such a sincere heartfelt apology for maybe wrong doing would be more than willing to forgive and be proud of your growth
    Admiting ones faults... having courage to be honest with yourelf is a great step forward to achieving a happier... more stable frame of mind! Bravo! and well done!!


  • blueyez
    August 8, 2007

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    In line 1 first stanza - confession
    Line 2 second stanza - point
    Line 3 last stanza - it's


    It's hard to look at ourselves and honestly see our own wrongs. But remember that usually we are our worst critic. Everyone has wronged, hurt, etc. someone else. It's a part of the human factor. It's a part of life. Don't be so hard on yourself. Just the fact that you wrote this shows that you have good character and heart. I hope you will feel better soon. Keep your head up.
    Peace and Love


  • whatever girl
    August 8, 2007

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    oh this is soo good!!!
    too bad you didn't enter it in a contest
    i love the first line the very best
    keep up your great work.


    • Greaks
      August 8, 2007
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      thanx

      thats very sweet of u to say .,...

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