A life without love,
fills her days with sorrow.
She cant go back,
But she cant move forward.
She is trapped by reality
and a dream she used to live.
She sees him in her dreams,
He is always on her mind.
She wishes she could move on,
at the same time she wishes she could go back.
She doesnt know whats right
or whats wrong...
A life without love is unbearable....
Author notes
brokenangel13
heartbreak
option 4 age 16
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A life without love is unbearable indeed - and most of us will be able to relate to the feeling you've put here...
The poem itself feels a bit clichéd to be honest.
Thank you for entering the contest!
Leander -
Disqualification- you didn't read the rules. Sad.
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breathtaking, simply and wonderfully breathtaking. i weep for this woman.
thank you for entering and good luck
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lovely.
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Wow...
It was beautiful, thanks for the great write! -
I'm having a problem with this one because of the lack of apostrophes. Sometimes, I guess, it's okay not to use them. I think they should be used at all times but that's me. However, I know some people don't, perhaps out of pure laziness; not stating that's why you don't use them, perhaps you have different reasons but in this poem I'm back, and forth on whether they are needed. My "grammar nazi" side states: 'yes', but, going by content, eh. But, then you have those particular words bunched up towards the end, and it seems nonsensical not to use them.
Anyway ...
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amazing stuff there...good luck!
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please put ur AP name in the authors notes
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This is perplexed. There is no in or out without love. My heart bleeds for this woman. This is truly sad but very well written. An accomplished entry written with simple wording but very emotional.
Thank you for this entry in this contest. I wish you the best.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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So sad, but a perfect explanation
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amazing amazing!
thank you so much for your entry!!
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