Alice was a little girl
wearing that pretty blue
[dress]
W.o.n.d.e.r.l.a.n.d
called out to her
so she went
/c
r\
/a
s\
/h
i\
/n
g\
[downdowndown] she goes
There she meets the
beautiful .white. rabbit --
but ¿where? is it going now?
Alice walks behind
following ---> in his footsteps .......
Alice screams as she sees
her worst nightmare taking place
a pink, gruesome animal
with |||sparkling|white|teeth|||
-come to me, my precious-
it purrs
&&Alice follows <--- once again
The chessy cat leads her to a house .......
where she is fed the x.poison.x
which leads to her death
in .wonderland.
&&Alice wakes up, under a tree...
My.fucking.God
It was all a dream ;;
Author notes
Updated DP for anyone who cared ♥
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Profanity aside, this piece is fantastic!
I love this Alice In Wonderland take mixed with the D.P. Great imagery and flow here.
Bravo!
♥ kate -
OK... Love the crasing bit!! You could probably use more dp for individual words, and blocks of writing. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
-heva -
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Thank you; I did update the style a bit because, I agree, I could have used more for it. If you care to take a look, that's fine! If not, that's fine too =]
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I did have a look, it's amazing. Great job.
-heva
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I loved the humor you put into this&& the references you made
best lines:
"&&Alice wakes up, under a tree...
My.fucking.God
It was all a dream ;;"
It really wrapped it all up
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Hah that was funny! But a good poem.
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Short and BitterSweet!
Love the ending, just what i'd say after a dream of that calibre
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