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A life without love,
A tear without an eye,
A baby without a mother,
Lessons learnt like no other,
A duck without a pond,
A smile without a mouth,
A heart where flows no blood,
Love nourishes a heart and is life.
A mirror devoid of any glass,
A path in life without direction,
A mind confused full of apprehension,
We must love ourself or end in confusion.
To love is the sperm of being,
To laugh is the start of us seeing,
To live is the attitude needed for loving,
A life without love is a game merely existing.
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In a list
A contest entry
- A not so quick contest (24 hours) by poetryality.
525 points, ended August 13, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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what a wonderful message. this echoes that life without love is empty in powerful images
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Yes! All of this and so much more would not exist if there were no love. You have written a poem that delivers the message; "we need love to live". Excellent!
Thank you for this entry and the best to you.
Much LOVE ♥
Renee
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This is beautiful and has a wonderful message. Very deep and thought provoking. I loved the imagery and the flow. Well done. Good luck in the contest. I hope you place. I loved it.
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This is a beautiful poem with so much depth. Each sentence speaks such volumes with such wonderful imagery. All the best for the contest.
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Wonderful!
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Great
I like the second stanza especially
and the part about loving ourself.
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Superior writing Bazza as usual and beautiful feelings about the heart twisted with wounds and painful time. The way i perceive it. To love unconditionally release the guilt and get on with the recovery in confidence and truth about it. I like the touch of nature around your poem soften the discernment. Escapes from the heart are always nearby. There is always enough sun for everyone. Always enough guidance to go around and always enough time to love. Personal love and intensity in intimacy to me is to feel close to nature, God, us all. There is evidence in your poem of abundance to be continuously conscious of the nearness of love and find the courage to place ourselves in its presence... you said it to love is the sperm of being, to live is the attitude we need love. Genius!
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First line: A life without love..last line: A life without love is a game merely existing...sweetly tied together write. You placed all the game pieces within the body of the work and we come to the end and see the one piece that makes the game worth playing...love. Nice tight word choices and images: duck w/out a pond, heart w/ no blood, and my favorite...a baby w/out a mother...mmmm..I like this line best because it hints at the divine spark of real love. Well written piece, good luck in the contest with it. Peace, Rhonda
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Bazza, it seems that every time I visit your work, you have developed and grown. This work is simple and mature. I'm proud of you.
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merely existing...
Well written... and well said my friend! I like the flow os this poem, its structure and its message. The last line sums the poem up perfectly!
Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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