Gone ashamed
The light loosened
A circle inverted
By chains invisible
Sleeping worlds
Comprehending written peels
Of discolored light
Laugh at misdirection
Author notes
"These moments as beautiful as they are, are evil when they're are gone"
No rules
A contest entry
- Can't take me home by Naridill.
300 points, ended August 16, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Darkness of an angsty sort dwell within. Very potent piece of thought conveyed. Nicely done!
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I think this piece is missing a few words, I read it aloud and didn't make much sense but maybe thats lack of grammar. Either way, it is still brilliantly worded just a little confusing.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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yes, many of us have experienced such misdirection, but whoever said life was easy.
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Excellent As Always
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This is wonderful. There is an intense amount of depth in such little writing. The concluding line is chilling and ends the poem wonderfully; a raw direction full of poignancy. Each line is wonderful and sleeping worlds conjures a multitude of images. Amazing job and best of luck.
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Hey I really liked this. You have done a wonderful job
delila
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well said Mark. True enough...cant say how great this is, well i guess i just did. Best of luck to you in the contest.
tory
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